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pen paper pain


I do not fear beasts
from the realms of
your imagination,
their fangs are
only as sharp
as your pen.
Beauty knows
how to terrorise
a man’s soul far more
then your dark demons can.
So write your toxic
depraved poetry of stench
and decaying corpses
but take heed, beware
angels with blond hair.

Do you write of self harm
and bleed your emotions
on to the page,
in tales of rape and abuse
of how you were torn?
Are you dead on the
inside unable to love
or be loved? Do you
relive your pain in poetry?
Pen, paper, pain
over and over
thoughts get
Deeper, darker more profane:
are you insane?

Dark deeds are not written but done.
Do you want me to write
of blood boiling rage?
Alas, my thoughts are cold
my demons caged,
along with my morality
and my compassion.
I am logical not emotional
emotions are toys.
Come, play with me?
Not in this pretend darkness
but in the cold light of day,
why do you hide from reality?
The darkness you seek is death:
I can give it to you?
“Let me be your saviour”








 

   


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  • upperworld06
    September 21
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    wow, this is really nice. great job, i like the whole thing. good luck

  • Fritz O skennick silver member
    September 11

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    Oh so dark... And I love it!!!

    Fantastic!!!
    Hypnotic in its rhythm & flow...
    Seductive in its cold clarity...
    Yep, definately loving the darkness here...
    Had me captivated throughout...
    Well done!!!


  • Luckintheshadows
    September 9

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    Impressive! This is absolutely brilliant. Words can't really describe adequately how amazing I think this is, but I can pick out my most favourite parts:
    "Pen, paper, pain
    over and over
    thoughts get
    Deeper, darker more profane:
    are you insane?"
    AND
    "I am logical not emotional
    emotions are toys.
    Come, play with me?"
    AND
    "The darkness you seek is death:
    I can give it to you?
    “Let me be your saviour”"

    Some wonderful verbal backhanders here too...Thanks for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,

    Luck.


  • iiwuvyouxoxo
    September 8
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    what a fantastic write and a great take on what i was looking for
    a finalist for sure


  • know one
    August 29
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    wow

    This is AMAZING!!!

  • BrokenDawn
    August 13

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    Wow this is so amazing I am wordless to know how to describe it! The entire thing was so well written but the second stanza stood out for me. Bravo and Good Luck!
    ~dawn♥

  • Polaja
    August 7
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    I like the notion that beauty does more damage than beast, well thought out. Thank you for entering this contest just a note to ask you to check that you have followed the rules - I wish you the best of luck when it comes to judging!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • LaylaLace
    May 14
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    I loved the second stanza the best


  • LadyUnique silver member
    May 8
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    thank you for entering and good luck

  • ThatONEweirdChick
    May 4
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    Oooooh. I really like this. The second stanza is my favorite part of it. I like how you started out with statements and then continued the poem by going thru questions. Totally worth winning in all of the contests you have entered it in.
  • Bob Fox
    May 4
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    Interesting write

    Perhaps it may sound a little chastising or maybe a hint of the devil himself speaking but it is well constructed and sure the hell beats the .. I love you as our bodys meld together crao tht overflows here on AP. Well done


  • Cat10
    April 28
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    thank you for entering! this is a great poem! you did a really nice job with this! good luck in the contest!!

  • Emile
    April 24

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    Good

    You’ve captured so much beauty, pain and wisdom into a few lines. I really enjoyed your words. You're creative and imaginative in your subject matter. This is very good with superb imagery and the emotion grabs you from the start and never lets go. The story is so realistically described one can feel each breath of fear summoned from the deep dark recesses of the mind, where they so often dwell. Very good job of creating a powerful emotional statement.

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