We could have been anyone and still we were no one.
I remember a time before. A time when we were high
on fizzy drinks and bravado and the world was our oyster
[or so to speak]. Even before, when child like innocence
was the ink in our crayons and we promised forever.
[Touch.down.turn.around]
It's not like it hurts that much anyway
[Upside.down.and.inside.out]
Days never seemed so bleak on park benches.
Admit it. We're chasing shadows and trying to
entwine our fingers in the past.
But it's all relevant[all futile]
We already painted over forever.
Author notes
I absolutely [heart] Tish-the-terrible-rawr for letting me use her line 'days never seemed so bleak on park benches'. Love you piggy
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This is my favorite poem on AP.
"We could have been anyone and still we were no one."
I've Been there before.
"I remember a time before. A time when we were high
on fizzy drinks and bravado and the world was our oyster
[or so to speak]. Even before, when child like innocence
was the ink in our crayons and we promised forever."
I love this part.
"But it's all relevant[all futile]
We already painted over forever."
Amazinggg.
I LOVE this poem.
you're 15? thats incredible. I wish i could have wrote this good when I was your age.
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wow. the imagry is great in this poem! i woud love to hear more
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" We're chasing shadows and trying to
entwine our fingers in the past.
But it's all relevant[all futile]
We already painted over forever."
This is so well written, simply briliant.
I like the sadness that's hidden within these magnificent lines.
Great writing.
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thats is really good, good luck. i love the way you use the bracets and all your stanzas are different lengths
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MY LINE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
woot lol
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a good piece, ah the past, only in memory can it be replayed, but that is not too bad for the future holds lots too
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I love it.. Your an amazing poet! Great write.. Im glad to see your writing again. Keep it up.
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Aww thanks
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Wow: this is great! The last four lines were my favorite! What a way to end the piece.
Congrats on the great write -
This is a really great write. The title went great wih this poem, as well as how you ended this, I loved the last sentence. Well done, this is great.
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Painting over forever .... interesting .... thanks for entering and best of luck.
Keira
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