Your tongue burns my lips
to the point I can hardly speak,
and my words choke me
when I try to answer.
(You poured out lies
like cleaner down my throat)
And the air in here clouds my mind
with smell of coffee laced fags
when confronted with your
…indiscretions?
But all you seem to do is laugh
and try to force feed me
rat poison drizzled over fancy fibs.
Author notes
Prompt: Rat poison drizzled over fancy fibs
A contest entry
- 20 Poets (woot woot) (Semi-Quickie)(points will go up) by AddictingAccident.
450 points, ended April 30, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn That Silver Into Gold! by Nicada.
300 points, ended October 8, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really like what you did with the prompt here. This is full of some very strong emotions. Great job, and thanks so much for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed it ^_^
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Interesting
I think I have read enough of your poems to be able to recognized your type of writing. I do have to say, this poem is a bit different from your rest. I enjoyed it though. I like how you were straight forward and a little harsh, but kept it eloquent! Almost as if you were telling someone they are like a poison to your life, but you've done it so regally! Bravo!
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Your comments always make me smile, thanks for all the kind words and applause! ^_^
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lols, For writing such poems as yours, you are very welcome!
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hahaha, flattery will get you everywhere my friend
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this is different than your other writes , I adore the anger in this.....The more i read your work the more I am fond of you, I think it is safe to say that you have found yourself stalker.
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Haha, just what I've always wanted! ^_^
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Brutally honest
Good god, this is abrasively straight-forward tell-off of someone who has poisoned your life. sometimes our best work is done in anger or grief. IMHO
Keep writing!
Erik
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very good. i'll keep an eye out for more poems from you. keep up the great work
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Thanks so much ^_^ Glad you enjoyed it
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hehehe laughing at the word fags i know we brits use that for smoking but usa peeps will see it differently
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Oh my, I almost forgot to thank you for the applause! Much thanks for that and the comment, it made me laugh!
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Hahaha, you know, I actually wondered if I should put it up there but I figured it wouldn't do any harm... I assume most people know it's a cigarette, or at least they do now!
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Very great write! you worded this poem wonderfully!
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!!
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