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Keys
serene
lingering
harmonious
~ o 0 o ~
Vanquish skeletons
harlequin’s pageant minstrels
melodrama’s spectacles
with lilting keynotes
~ o 0 o ~
Tonality
amplifies
jesting
to
frolic
embracing
the toe tapper
~ o 0 o ~
Engage euphony
banish Babel’s last clamor
revel the calling encore
wield verbosity
~ o 0 o ~
A balcony
performance
scaling
notes
lofty
absorbed by
velvet curtains
~ o 0 o ~
The master passkey
opening stage fright’s jitters
anxiety voyagers
divine harp survives
~ o 0 o ~
Doors unlock when
romantic
love songs
play
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Author notes
*Arkquain Swirl* (see contest for form structure)
Credit for Form...Arkbear
Picture credit...Inebriantia
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXVIII by Arkbear.
500 points, ended May 6, 8 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi there ~
Let me start with....perfect count....superb grammatical choices, and lovely Images for my brain to grasp and hold on to ~
However, as I have always mentioned with Poetry Formed with strict syllable count....it is in strcict count, because these forms were given to their Masters thousands of years ago as Gifts....and when I created the Arkquain, and Swirl and Chain, it is meant to be Art, just as it was in ancient asian days in western culture ~
Your presentation could use a great amount of editing to acheive that perfect diamond shape, swirling as a lanturne or Cinquian Swirl ~
With that said.....I am very impressed with your efforts and as I have mentioned, your grammatical choices are superb.....but choosing the correct grammar to fit into that perfect swirling diamond is 90% of the challenge.....and still allowing Flow to be smooth and unrestricted ~
I love the talent of your quill, and I hope you join me again in another Poetry Formed contest.....we will be doing the Lanturne Swirl next :)
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I do hope you join me :)
God bless you for taking the time to enter your wonderful talents :)
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Great Write
I get the impression that you wrote about a performer or a perfomance the imagery is bold. Opening stage fright jitters. I did a poetry reading a few years back. I know about stage fright jitters. I was afraid but I used the fear. I looked at my audience then I just took a step off. I felt like I was falling but then I got air benethe my wings and soared.
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Nice write! Great imagery both with words and screen! Good luck in the contest.
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Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
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Tang,
Nicely written. A very challenging form, indeed. You did it! I'll have to try this one sometime. Keep the ink flowing. Good luck in the contest. Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Name the song, I've got ivories sitting here waiting for a figertip's caress.
Love it. I can see the challenge in this form, how interesting. But you brought it together quite nicely.
Best of luck in the contest hun.
Storm
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