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An Effort at Giving Up

breath
becomes an effort

and nothing
anymore linked

no energy
to move ahead

no direction
no desire
no purpose

beginnings
merge with
ends

living
with the
non-living

death
is another kind of
life.

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  • fathom me
    May 14, 2008

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    Hi Sau
    seems very bare and true to the moment or perhaps a phase... I wish you'd feel comfortable to call sometime, it's been long..
    I like your poems reflecting life a lot.. Perhaps in facing these moments we value the sweeter ones even more.. Like someone wiser said, death of anything or any kind is a gateway to a new beginning, newer level, newer phase in life.
    I hope you enjoy the adventure, wishing you luck and warmth always


  • Mari Goes gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    Oh my, this is so very somber!!!
    hey you my dear friend, cheer up, because life is the best way to live. Leave the death for when the body is really needy, not for when we think we need
    we must not give up, not give in, for you know even the smallest tree won't bend when the roots are solid and attached to a rich soil. Your mind is rich, just wave your arms and let the storm pass by.