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Follow Me

Now here’s a game that we can play
So listen to me well
And we can play it everyday
As far as I can tell
Now clap your hands and turn around
Jump up real high and hit the ground
Now clap your hands
Now clap your hands
And try to make a whistle sound

Now here’s a game that we can play
I promise we’ll have fun
Just look at me, do what I say
Get off the ground and run
Now stop right there and clap your hands
Just follow all of my commands
Now stop right there
Now stop right there
I’m taking you to magic lands

Now here’s a game that we can play
I’m still the leader here
So flap your arms and fly away
I hope that I am clear
Now be a bird that’s in the air
And you can fly most everywhere
Now be a bird
Now be a bird
Now you’re the leader so it’s fair

 

 

 

Author notes

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 31

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    This is wonderfully written and its very different. This was wonderfully writen. This is cute to to get the children to listen.


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    January 30
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    this is very fresh and different, i love it, thanks for entering


  • melphleg gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    delightful

    I have played games like this with kids. I will do "follow the leader" We will march like a robot, crawl on the floor, skip, fly like a bird... Kids love it. Enjoyable piece.


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    Wonderful! A rhyme good for chanting while the game is being played. Like something to sing while jumping rope. You do it so well!


  • Legend silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Yet another wonderful piece,hard to say which one of your two entries i prefer.Both include the children in there reading Excellent, if one don't win the other will
    Good luck


  • Swan song gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Well this will keep those little ones active. I like this simple flow and playful tone.


  • Desire gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Precious!!

    Oh My Apple Pie You have Enchanted also Inspired me to want to dance also get my quill dancing too
    Love this piece You have penned my Friend!!
    In fine form too

    Now here’s a game that we can play
    I promise we’ll have fun
    Just look at me, do what I say
    Get off the ground and run
    Now I had to run and come back to finish
    reading

    Love it!! Much FUN!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • second-born
    April 23, 2008

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    this is so delightful...a very nice read and children would definitely love it for they could easily follow the directions...and besides that you puit a touch of imagining that all children love...such an awesome wirte!


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    this is one piece that I truly enjoy. the innocence of children is something that is being stripped from them far too fast. I am so glad to see a version of following the leader in verse. Great job. However, you did not put in "I understand" to show that you have read the rules. Please correct this as soon as possible.


  • Ithica silver member
    April 23, 2008
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    The magic of our childhood games... This is as sweet as you can get!! And it made me smile!!!


  • Faeryn
    April 23, 2008

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    This is such a sweet poem, Amera. It makes me smile and feel happy. Best of luck in the contest.
    Love,
    Tay


  • roses on fire
    April 23, 2008

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    YAY

    yay mom!!! what a nice poem... very entertaing and very sweet...
    i loved it and i love you!!
    p.s have you read my new poem? check it out!!
    i LOVE you sooo much and i hope to talk to you real soon...
    roses

  • Papagallo
    April 23, 2008

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    A sweet poem and I wish you luck in the contest. To be a child again and play such sweet games. You are most talented, Thanks for shaing, Papagallo


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Well done, Sis...

    (Oh come on, that's THREE words )

    Okay, okay... er... good luck in the contest.

    Bunnies 4 U


  • StarEyes
    April 23, 2008

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    I can't wait to share this with my grandsons! They have the energy to run around like this! What a fun read!!

    Best of luck to you in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    April 23, 2008

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    sissss you've done it again
    a masterpiece with a masterful BG so sweett and ur poem just rock rocks rocks baddd
    love you loads sis and good lucks


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    I did what you said but I tripped over twice, slamed into the wall and bruised my bum!!! Apart from that I'm fine!!!
    xxx Love Hilly


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 23, 2008
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    Right form, right sentiment, right feeling for a children's made up on the spot game.
    Superb.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    You sure did kick a muse here! WOWY! This poem has so much energy! I just love it! Aneka is here with me and also think that this is "fun" as she put it, had to read it about 5 times.

    All the best in the contest!

    Becks


    • Amera gold member
      April 23, 2008
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      If it has Aneka's approval then I just won! She's my best critic.


  • Melodies
    April 23, 2008

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    Adorable and most beautifully written with smiles and love built in! Poetry like this is so valuable because it can help children grow in light and love.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww

    This is adorable my sweets
    Perfect form that paints a great picture of the little ones having so much fun.
    You have not missed a single beat in your briliiant poetic talents in taking it to a childrens genre.
    BRAVO!
    Well penned Trijan Refrain
    I shall have to try this form as well
    Wish you the best in the contest!

    Much love,
    Many blessings
    David


  • penman gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    Excellent

    Oh my you have penned such a great poem. And made it in form too. Such a great creation. Best of luck in the contest.


  • creationsfromheart
    April 22, 2008

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    This is adorable, I love this! reminds me of when we were kids always trying to find another game to play, I love this so much and the form is wonderful!

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