You said
I was never
More
Than garbage
'N clay
Your fist
To mend
'N mold
Mommy
Another man
Another day
Another drink
Another fit
No wire hangers
Mommy
You laugh
'N guzzle
Another pawn
For your board
Bargain basement
In your house
Free labor
Mommy
No kiss
But
A slap
Bruises
On the lips
Hug me
To death
Mommy
Your words
Like a knife
Bleed me dry
Your hands
Upon
The gun
Shoot me
One last time
Mommy
Yell
Till I'm deaf
Covet
Till I'm blind
Fast
Till I'm bone
Brittle
'N breakin'
Mommy
Scream
Until I cry
Won't flinch
Won't deny
Story
Told right
From
The horse's mouth
Die
'N go to Hell
Sweat like a pig
Toture
In your mind games
Just another battle
Won
Fuck you
Mommy Dearest.
A contest entry
- The Best, New or Old by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended April 26, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The defiance in the last stanza brings power to the victim in this write, I like that. I hope I don't hurt your feelings, but I don't care for the whole Mommy Dearest/wire coat hanger theme. I think it destracts from the power of your message. Everyone knows the whole Mommy Dearest story, and I feel like you could have found your own terminology to not put a Hollywood cliche on your piece. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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This is a very emotional write. Very well written and I can feel the pain and anger throughout. It is also very sad, and many people could relate to this unfortunately, myself included. Writing can be so healing...Patty
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