we stand opposite from each other
segregated
your skin cherry wood black
and mine ivory white.
slowly i make the first move,
removing myself
from this square confinement.
you watch with a strategic grin,
listening to how my carved body
moves against checkered tiles.
confident
you knock me down with your king
and i fall off the board,
mocking death.
waiting for you
to follow me
leaving all the other pieces
to stare at our stale mate.
Author notes
chess
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- Games by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended April 26, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty
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haha nice. i didn't get it for a second...ahHA. a beautiful one, in it's sneaky-sneakyness.
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I believe you set the piece up well in the first stanza.
Really liked stanza one and two but it almost seems like three was a bit more of a rush to finish. It wasn't as cohesive as the rest.
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this was worth the wait. i love the whole thought behind this. the way you used the color of the squares as the color of his and your skin was very clever.
"ivory white" - i think if you would have stuck to just 'ivory' it would have been better. having both kind of made me think 'well, is it ivory or white?' - just to keep it simple i'd say ivory.
i kind of think the ending was predictable, but the way you wrote it was nice. overall, well written.
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Thanks I posted it two days ago, I didn't realize
I had to post it on the column as well...sorry about
that misunderstanding! peace to all ~flight
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I LOVE this! this is one of my faves, nice title too.
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damn.
i've never read something so inspiring, and using chess! just.. unbelieveable. the way you described the board as your skin; very clever <3
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A nice play on words
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thank you
peace to all ~flight
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