A secret unknown,
Our hearts hidden.
The joining of souls,
And now I'm smitten.
When did it happen,
You gave it to me.
Am I worthy?
Holding the key.
From the world to protect,
I held it apart.
This thing so fragile,
I'm guarding your heart.
This decision I've made,
Your heart given to me.
Combining our souls,
I've set our hearts free.
Author notes
This was my first attempt. I was dating at the time and the new found muse for me was starting to come out. While very short and simple it was a good starting point for me with more in dept and elaborate love poems coming out later on. it was written January 18th, 2008.
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very lovely my dearest friend
an excellent job keep it up
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Thanks Ashley.
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Ah..what a beautiful work you brought here ..I love this work..thanks for sharing such a wonderful write....
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Your welcome. Thank you for allowing it in your contest.
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Good love poem I enjoyed it. Thanks for entering the contest.
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Thank you and Good luck judgeing.
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Truely you have touched the depth while describing your heart in a verse..I love this wonderful piece..well done....
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Thank you for the comment and allowing me to comment on your poem. Its awesome.
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So sweet. I love it.
It rhymes perfectly. Never missed a beat.
Amazing.
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You should read through my whole list of love poems then.
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Heyy, This is an awesome poem !! I loved it, the way it rhymed. !! =D
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Almost all of my poetry rhymes.
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short and sweet... very nice... sometimes the best feeling and emotions come from those... thank you for entering and good luck...
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Love is so complex but cant be so simple at time. I believe poems expression an emotion should mirror the emotion.
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as per the rule: PLACE your author name in your author notes box. ONE warning will be given before disqualification.
i must ask you to do this or i will have to disqualify this wonderful write from this contest. thank you for entering. viyanna rosemarie -
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OK Its done sorry about that.
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Nice little poem about love which has a carefree feel about it, and yet a warmth that's very sweet.
Well done.
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Thank you
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This is really cute. I like it alot. It shows some hesitation, but I am sure you are glad that you decided to take the keys to her heart. Great write and keep up the good work!
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The hesitation was more a feeling if inadequacy. And now being able to look back on it I wish I never had.
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if this is ur first attempt its awsome! i like it and if this is only ur first then i cant wait for ur 2nd attempt
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Just pay attention. There should be some more of them coming soon.
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aw i wish i had someone that felt that way about me.. -sigh- very sweet poem i enjoyed it greatly
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Everyones time comes. I am no longer with the person who I wrote this poem for. Actually I have a few poems coming up about being dumped.
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hey darling.its amazing. im soo glad this one makes you happy i look forward to seeing more joyful and loving poems. you can really see your love in it amazing!
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Thanks Kodi. I have to say the love poems are my favorite to write. I had a great muse at the time as well.
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wow for your first attempt this is amazing.
i love this last stanza the best.
amazing job Jaq, cant wait to read more.
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Well pay attentiont I should be posting more here soon.
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We all have to have a starting point, if we don't then we will never know if we are improving or not and I have to say that while this is a very short, simple and sweet poem of love you have definitely improved and it has been a pleasure to watch.
Keep up the good work...Sue 
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Thanks Ms Sue. Of All the diffeerent types of muse that I've had love definatly inspired my best work. Even from the ver beginning.
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Sweet!
For your first attempt this is very good! Love poems are so hard to write with out becomming cliche. This one was fresh and straight from the heart. I like the third stanza the best - its how love should be! -
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I think what makes this poem so good is its simplicity. I really wasnt elaborate with it and it came out fine. Thanks for the comment and the compliment.
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not bad at all
very good for your first attempt or is the first one you've posted hehehe jk but it's actually quite good keep it up -
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Its my first attempt in years if that counts. I'm posting my poetry in the order that it was written so the other "love poems" that i have written will be posted here shortly.
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ah well thats cool keep it up though
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Thank you and I will.
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nice
very sweet, and also its not up to you to feel worthy just lucky for the fact that someone can make you feel this way and that you bring them such happiness, we as people deserve all we can grasp but the catch is finding it.
thanks for sharing
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I agree with you but at times a person cant help but feel lucky about being with someone. When you put someone on a pedestal they are no longer on the same level as you.
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awwwwwwwwwwwww omgosh it's sooooooooooo sweet and all sensitive and mushy awwwwwwwwwwww
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LOL so sweet and sensative and mushy is a good thing?
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lol totally a good thing it's a tear jerker but not in the sad painful angry way it's in the um "Walk to Remember" kind of way ok thats a chick flick so it might not ring a bell but lol in other words "it was very touching and you did a great job"
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I've seen it before so I know what yoiu mean and dont make fun of me for that.
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na na ni bo bo *makes funny faces to taunt u* lol j/k it's okay I love that movie.
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Yeah Yeah go ahaid lol.
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I love it! As I'm sure I've already told you
You're writings are always so sweet
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Well you do get to read the poems before anyone else does. So yeah you told me before. And i thank you for telling me in my comments as well.
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Awww. this was so sweet,and yet for some reason(don't know why) it seemed like there was a little sadness.. I don't know though it was more then likely just me(I tend to see sadness ever..lol.) You did such a great job here..You expressed so much..
"From the world to protect,
I held it apart.
This thing so fragile,
I'm guarding your heart"
I loved this part.....Well done..
Jetleena
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I think what your picking up wasnt sadness but the feeling of unworthyness and fear that I was gonna screw things up in the end. I've always tried to portray emotion more than anything else in my poems and this one was a feeling of awe that i really was trying to get at.
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