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Bees...


awaken from their slumbering hive

with the warm winds.. billowing to their taste


softly gliding over their golden backs

shaking them gently awake


the smell of pollen upon the air -

blooming flowers, laden neighborhood trees


soft petals – already fallen... like a lightly dusting snow

upon the most emerald grass – as the days grow warmer


humming down their path, deeply within their chests

humming, humming, humming...


to the nearest flower – to brush their legs

until sacs are full – their legs budging with orange pollen


until they can carry no more -

and must find their lumbering way to the hive


with a meal in their palms...

and the smell of honey rich in the air




Author notes

I haven't thought of a title yet. But, I will be thinking =]

My prompt:
(A four letter word) Bees.

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  • liatheddrfreak
    May 10, 2008
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    YIPEE!

    I'm still bored!

  • Oh the majesty of His Creation!

    Wonderful write. Very visual, I was there taking in the flight & activity of the bees! I can smell the fragrance of the flowers now & taste the sweetness of the honey. Thanks for this pleasant journey. I think surely this warranted a trophy!


  • obscenegesture
    May 4, 2008

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    I'm more in favor of the more 'metaphorical' description-like poems, but this almost makes me flail around like crazy at imaginary buzzy things. What a fun write!


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    May 4, 2008

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    This is a fun write all the four letter words. Very good I enjoyed it. Keep writing you have a gift.


  • herrlurch
    May 4, 2008

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    Mmmmm

    Time for flowers and blossoms and bees and plants and ponds and green and grass and clouds and skies again... I felt like there!


  • Ithica silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    BEE-YOO-T-FUL... I really like this saga of cross pollination... It just humms with contentment! I feel all warm and fuzzy now...!!! hehe!


  • KayJay
    April 22, 2008
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    Beautifully warm and buzzing with energy... What a great homage to bees.
    Ken

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