By my own will, I'm beginning to find
That as you moved along, I fell behind
I cannot lie, and I've come to believe
That who I used to know you will never be
Please go away, I'm not needing this now
Because, without you, I will forget how
You were drifting away, and I just couldn't see
When you decided to choose all of them over me
I'm sitting in silence, though you're seated nearby
And with each word you speak, my heart wants to die
Though as this all happens my smile remains
As I try to ignore the mess you became
I have other friends, and I've made other plans
Without you around I've done what I can
This can be easy, and we can be free
I'm here without you, please be without me
I was the cause when that door met your face
As I broke a friendship I could not replace
For in the end it was I, who went without you
But to be your friend, I still wish it true
Author notes
12) "Good-bye's make you think. They make you realize what you've had and what you've lost, and what you've taken for granted." -unknown
A contest entry
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450 points, ended October 15, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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this was amazing!
I loved it! it was beautiful! so amazing! you said so much in so little words! just...WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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I like it, just not a winner. Thanks for entering!
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thank you so much for entering this poem! i thought this write was amazing! it is all i have ever wanted to say and more! i can relate so much to this poem that it's insane! good luck!
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I've lost many close friends in the short time I've lived this life (24 years). Mostly because times change and people grow and change with the times. Unfortunately, the growing apart aspect of friendship is just another part of life, that takes time to mend.
For in the end it was I, who went without you
But to be your friend, I still wish it true
But here is a bit of hope for you! Me and my best friend have 'slammed' many doors in eachothers faces... we've been friends for 14 years. In such cases like this, we like to learn and grow from eachother, these are the best kind of friends!
(sorry for such a long comment!) Best of luck in the contest
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Wow! Really well written poem you have here! I have to keep rereading it to get it all! We've all had friends who didn't turn out so great, and we've all had "friends" that we've just had to bear with and move away from when we could. I'm not sure what kind of things you are going through now, but this poem obviously has a lot of meaning for you. I have a few comments for you, though. The second stanza is a little confusing. You did well with the rhyming, beat, and flow throughout the poem, but I just don't see how the middle two lines in the second stanza go with the rest of it. Same with the last two lines in the third stanza. I think that the ending would be more powerful if you were to vocalize your feelings into a strong ending sentence. When I was reading it, it felt a little undefined, as if you were unsure about your feelings. That is totally understandable! This is life, and it is hard to get your feelings down just right, but a stronger ending would have lead to a stronger impression on the entire piece. Well, thanks for reading all this! Don't be discouraged, and good luck in the contest! =D
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Thank you so much for the comment. It really helped a lot and I tried to fix some of the things you mentioned. I hope it worked =)
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wow! I like the lines you changed! It made the entire piece really clear. Well done!
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oh. my. god. this is t=like the exact reprise to "child and puppy"... oh. my. god. oh. my. GOD!!
weird...
fantastically written. but i don't believe in ending friendships. i believe in adjusting them.
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sorry may have misread... is this regret for ending the friendship?
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haha. it is kind of regret, but i have to agree with you that id rathre adjust a friendship then end it
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Wow this is sad but I like it. For I have been there and I am sure so many others have too. I love the way it flows so smoothly all the way to the end. Very deep, and emotional and beautiful. Keep it up!!
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