From the broken heart
To the broken will to part way
Life full of broken dreams
Yet from the broken, you still knew me
Once broken, but now healed
In the absents of my days as well
From the crying tears that fall from your eyes
To the trail of lies
Through everything only will the heart
Help you find what is truly right
You keep falling into the wrong crowd
You can’t seem to stand alone
You feel so weak without someone there
To hold you up when you are falling down
Yet you just keep falling on your face
Your mind has become a mind
Not of patience, but it’s in a race
You seem to be lost in the world around you
You’re to caught up in the lies you hear
To caught in the falsehood of man
No wonder you keep getting that broken heart
All you want is a brand new start, but
Oh you keep on falling face first down
You keep losing your balance
No one is around
Take a look see in mind
The way you are to be
The way you will be
You must stay here a while
And you will finally find what true love is really all about!
You won’t be falling down no more
No, I’ll be there to catch you when you fall
I’ll be your safety net, I’ll hold you up higher
Higher than you ever dreamed of being
And from the broken you will be raised
And forever shall you be loved with a whole heart
This is not just a moment of happiness
But it is more than one moment
It’s something called for always this true gift
I give, For always, and always even from the grave
We’ll still live
Peace, yet sense the love of mine
In a list
A contest entry
- Whatever Your Heart Desires by xxhoopstar21xx.
300 points, ended June 8, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do you have emotions? by Forgotten Anomaly.
550 points, ended October 27, 182 entries
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o sweet
your poems touch my heart and make me emotional i can relate to your poems...
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Wow this is and amazing poem. It sounds a lot like me but I don't have the person there to catch me when I am falling. This is a beautiful poem it really blows my mind this girl is very lucky to have someone there like you I really love these lines:
Take a look see in mind
The way you are to be
The way you will be
You must stay here a while
And you will finally find
what true love is really all about
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This is such a wonderfull and emotional read.It hits home in many ways.I regreatfully have to eliminate this however due to the amount of words.I had asked for 30 words top. I really regreat having to do this.
LE
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That was beautiful. Your words just flow together in the most perfect way, and the most wonderful message and feeling comes out. Definitely a spirit raiser. Keep up the good work because you do it so well, and I'm sure there's tons more in that head of yours!
Sincerely,
ModernXTimes -
i love it!!!!!
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Great poem, indeed. The theme behind it is powerful
and there was in-depth emotion behind it, too
The lines may be simple but it makes
your piece meaningful and have that author's great touch ^^
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Great poem. i hope i find someone like that to show me what love is really suppose to be like. this is my fav from your collection..i especially like the 7th stanza.
ps thanx for the comment -
falling on ur face a metaphor for failed relationships i take it?
nice poem
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wow very emotional i loved it!!!
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Very well done; it captures the emotions well! I enjoyed reading this from start to finish.
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Very nice write and very powerful. 3 thumbs up from me keep on the good writing
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interstin
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Wow this poem almost moved me to tears. I actually took off my headphones, as not to pollute the over-all feel. Very great read. Beautifully penned, good job.
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This was very good. Couple suggestions: stanza 5 line 3, should be 'too' I think? Also, there were some points in the piece where I stumbled on your wording- perhaps read it out-loud to yourself, and try to reword some of the awkward parts. This would strengthen your poem. Other than this, your work was excellent, thanks for sharing,
KP -
This poem filled me with so many memories and emotions, thank you.
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Take a look see in mind
The way you are to be
The way you will be
You must stay here a while
And you will finally find what true love is really all about!
pretty amazing write.. i really like it. i still feel you can enhance this write to a master piece it can be
thanks for commenting on my work and you too have a great talent.. keep writing and welcome to ap
regards
abdulla
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wow... i really love this poem... it reminds me of... well, me. i really like the rhyming too, and the beat of it makes me wonder... did this start out or end maybe as a song? good job!
reece
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lovely beautifully writen
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this is good kind of deprssin but good
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This is sadly sweet. Bitter sweet, perhaps? Sure.. I'll go with that.
Anyway, this is a very good poem. It holds such emotion that I can only -guess- that it comes from personal experiences? You should write more, I enjoy reading your writing! -
I really liked this piece, including the title. This flowed really nice from start to finish, I'm glad I read this.
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Wow Josh
That was really good I really think this is very inspiring -
That was well written. I really liked it!
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This poem is very well written... it shows the kind of situations everyone deals with and you could tell the author was expressing very sad feelings.
Gracy
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