Am a maze painted on walls of hell inked by time blessed from heaven through rhymes of GOD to create cruel poetry mixed with erotical imaginary to perform good and evil on the theater of life...
Am a lie written on the face of truth to mutilate a proud reality of GOD in the presence of angels to honor the demons of hard work of secret conspiracy that is known in public…
Am sensitivity blazed by the divine, balm by evil wrecking the existence of being what I am, making me rebel the work of GOD and art of heaven nicking me a Sinner
Am the spear of destiny that killed what is most holy, to be crowned by his blood unwillingly happened but damned I am cause the opposite needs me to unleash into this world and corrupt it
Am just a little child who wanted to play…but you had outcast me in a dark oubliette of my distracted past to open my wounds drinking my blood and smoke my soul, with hesitating laughter to call me a mockery…
This is for all those who have hurt me...I THANK YOU!
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great poem loved reading this
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Hi G.b.d.,
This is an absolutely amazing piece of writing - I sincerely salute you. For me 'Outcast' provides an historical context for the rest of your poetry I have read so far. As well, 'Outcast' provides the contextual meaning for the rest of your work. Honestly, G.b.d., at this precise moment I am tearful as I read your poem again - it resonates with me. I have known my own 'oubliette" and consequently I put an enormous value on personal freedom that is uncontaminated (as much as possible) by the concepts,ideas and perceptions of others and even from my own historical self. By the way G.b.d., the photograph is just perfect for your poem!!! Thank you. -
Wow, I think I could learn a thing or two about dark writing here, this packs a punch and then some. Superb write, the power held in each word is quite mind blowing. A much enjoyed read
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that was an amazing poem, very nice job, i loved it
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Brilliant writing! I haven't read a poem this well put together for a long time.
JADE*
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well...you are more than welcome young man!
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... speechless in awe...........
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words pinned into a corner will often chew their way out. love the Misha Gordin piece - one of my faves...
~ EZB
www.moodgroove.com
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and smoke my soul, this is wonderful so powerful this packs one hell of a punch, the style is great too.... proper poetry from the heart...
write on poet
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woah, now that's talent!
Great imagery! my fave was "am a lie written on the face of truth". nice job!
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I really like this.. you are really good at creating some really vivd images in your poetry which is rare and really good.. I enjoy reading your works.. the are really wonderful.. Thank you very much for sharing..
Angel
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I loved it
Like paul who beat upon his breast,!!
Am sensitivity blazed by the divine, balm by evil wrecking the existence of being whatI am, making me rebel the work of GOD and art of heaven nicking me a Sinner
I have writen about the struggles of trying to live right and having too many sad memeories
that try to control me until God intervined, you have writen it perfectly penned , I love your poem
Rend
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hehe awesome title for the comment area
interestingly long stencentes... on my monitor the last part of each line is always on it's own, which makes it look a bit funny as it's centered. I always prefer left-alignment though, that's just me.
definitly some powerful words here, I can hear them yelled into the swirling winds... -
and wounded was my heart when it read these sighs
yet healed was it when i read the thank you note
it is when we em brace our pains that we come clean
outcast u were but not anymore
outcast are we in this society
outcast are we if we confine to such misery called community....
peace amigos
miss u a lot online..
take care
sry it took me this long to read this wonderful piece
i love its flow and i love you
hehe
take care
********JOWELL********
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nice
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this is a really dark,deep write.it really brings someone to their sences..its shady to think that most young people are feeling this way and when things go wrong..poeple realize that they really were the ones to blame for the others "distorted"thioughts,if you will...this is a great write!!=].. always..Sarah
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I thank thee for such comment,rich with understanding and honor,and want to ask thee if its not odd to ask if there is a way to contact thee..frankly I know not why am requsting this...take care and God bless you.
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This poem literally takes your breath away - like a punch in the stomach.
If intensity is what you were going for - your bullet went straight through the middle of the target and straight into our minds.
Line 2: I think it should be "erotic imagery".
I absolutely loved the last stanza.
Brilliantly written, powerful write.
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It seems like you have learned much from being hurt, I love the language you use here.
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A tragically beautifull write, I like to see people take their pain and make it into something amazing, you took something that is usually cliche and really made it your own. I really like the depth and the style in which you wrote this, excellent write.
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Questions
Interesting and thought-provoking. Words that are veiled in puzzles may cause the reader to interpet them differently than the poet intended. Wonder what these metaphors say about you - and the reader, for that matter. Sometimes good poetry asks more questions than it answers. Reading this felt like you were holding up a mirror (to the reader) and challenging them to not only look in the mirror but to push it aside to see you behind it, too. Great write.
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Interesting
Am sensitivity blazed by the divine, balm by evil wrecking the existence of being what I am, making me rebel the work of GOD and art of heaven nicking me a Sinner
Am the spear of destiny that killed what is most holy, to be crowned by his blood unwillingly happened but damned I am cause the opposite needs me to unleash into this world and corrupt it
Interesting perfound words
I wonder for the full meaning
behind the thick metaphores
Rick
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Breathtaking!
Oh my gosh! I loved every word. All the way from the flow to the capitalization of GOD. Everything was so pristine and beautiful. It's been a long time since I've read something that could even compare to this. Thank you so much!! Great job. <33
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Very nice language; love the dark tone.
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life is one of the many things i have trouble understanding. its unfair, cruel, hateful, seductive many things we do not like. this is an amazing poem. great job
aj
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Brilliant Deep Throughts
I can relate to this write; I know hate, despair.
I know life will never be fair. I know love and I am a sinner that repents. This is a brilliant free verse that speaks volumes....The words are weary & dark. The metaphors are vividly wonderful...write on!...novy
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thank you
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Unnecessary
To comment on this would be to comment on my life and THAT would take a while. So, I'll just simply say that this piece is truly the one that has my heart because I can definitely relate to it in more ways than one....all the best!
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