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Outcast

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Am a maze painted on walls of hell inked by time blessed from heaven through rhymes of GOD to create cruel poetry mixed with erotical imaginary to perform good and evil on the theater of life...

Am a lie written on the face of truth to mutilate a proud reality of GOD in the presence of angels to honor the demons of hard work of secret conspiracy that is known in public…


Am sensitivity blazed by the divine, balm by evil wrecking the existence of being what I am, making me rebel the work of GOD and art of heaven nicking me a Sinner

Am the spear of destiny that killed what is most holy, to be crowned by his blood unwillingly happened but damned I am cause the opposite needs me to unleash into this world and corrupt it

Am just a little child who wanted to play…but you had outcast me in a dark oubliette of my distracted past to open my wounds drinking the blood and smoke my soul, with hesitating laughter to call me a mockery…

This is for all those who have hurt me...I THANK YOU!

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  • and wounded was my heart when it read these sighs
    yet healed was it when i read the thank you note

    it is when we em brace our pains that we come clean

    outcast u were but not anymore

    outcast are we in this society
    outcast are we if we confine to such misery called community....

    peace amigos
    miss u a lot online..

    take care
    sry it took me this long to read this wonderful piece
    i love its flow and i love you
    hehe
    take care
    ********JOWELL********

  • nice
  • this is a really dark,deep write.it really brings someone to their sences..its shady to think that most young people are feeling this way and when things go wrong..poeple realize that they really were the ones to blame for the others "distorted"thioughts,if you will...this is a great write!!=].. always..Sarah

    • I thank thee for such comment,rich with understanding and honor,and want to ask thee if its not odd to ask if there is a way to contact thee..frankly I know not why am requsting this...take care and God bless you.
  • This poem literally takes your breath away - like a punch in the stomach.
    If intensity is what you were going for - your bullet went straight through the middle of the target and straight into our minds.
    Line 2: I think it should be "erotic imagery".
    I absolutely loved the last stanza.
    Brilliantly written, powerful write.

  • celadia gold member
    April 30
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    It seems like you have learned much from being hurt, I love the language you use here.


  • RX-Queen
    April 30

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    A tragically beautifull write, I like to see people take their pain and make it into something amazing, you took something that is usually cliche and really made it your own. I really like the depth and the style in which you wrote this, excellent write.


  • BecomingDawn silver member
    April 26

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    Questions

    Interesting and thought-provoking. Words that are veiled in puzzles may cause the reader to interpet them differently than the poet intended. Wonder what these metaphors say about you - and the reader, for that matter. Sometimes good poetry asks more questions than it answers. Reading this felt like you were holding up a mirror (to the reader) and challenging them to not only look in the mirror but to push it aside to see you behind it, too. Great write.


  • Endeavor gold member
    April 24

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    Interesting


    Am sensitivity blazed by the divine, balm by evil wrecking the existence of being what I am, making me rebel the work of GOD and art of heaven nicking me a Sinner


    Am the spear of destiny that killed what is most holy, to be crowned by his blood unwillingly happened but damned I am cause the opposite needs me to unleash into this world and corrupt it

    Interesting perfound words
    I wonder for the full meaning
    behind the thick metaphores

    Rick

  • Breathtaking!

    Oh my gosh! I loved every word. All the way from the flow to the capitalization of GOD. Everything was so pristine and beautiful. It's been a long time since I've read something that could even compare to this. Thank you so much!! Great job. <33

    . Rewarded 4


  • Pingwen gold member
    April 23
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    Very nice language; love the dark tone.

  • life is one of the many things i have trouble understanding. its unfair, cruel, hateful, seductive many things we do not like. this is an amazing poem. great job

    aj


  • ennovy silver member
    April 22

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    Brilliant Deep Throughts

    I can relate to this write; I know hate, despair.
    I know life will never be fair. I know love and I am a sinner that repents. This is a brilliant free verse that speaks volumes....The words are weary & dark. The metaphors are vividly wonderful...write on!...novy


  • Pear gold member
    April 22

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    Unnecessary

    To comment on this would be to comment on my life and THAT would take a while. So, I'll just simply say that this piece is truly the one that has my heart because I can definitely relate to it in more ways than one....all the best!

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