Let me scream and shout
if I so choose
let my demons escape
take them out of my soul
they're gripping my heart
and they won't let go.
Let me shout and scream
I need to release
all the pent up anger.
And the devil inside
won't let go of my heart,
so I have to give up
the tranquility I had.
I will not rest yet,
I cannot embrace
this dark feeling inside.
I want to encounter
some softness and peace
but I'm pacing and restless
and it's difficult to breathe.
Let me kick and hit out,
Let me stamp
Let me shout
Let me do something final
so I leave you no doubt
that I will not lay down,
you will not make me cower,
I won't be your doormat,
you don't have that power.
I'm telling you now
go find someone else,
I won't be your mouthpiece.
You need to release
you're tight grip on my core,
for I will not relax.
Don't dare to ignore
what I say,
I'll destroy
what you try to achieve.
Let me shout
Let me scream
I am not that naive.
Get out of my way
I'll tell you no more,
whatever you say
I will shut this door.
It's over, it's finished
I want you no more.
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ForeverLastingComa
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Comments
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Judge
Very good. Maybe If you would align It to the left It would be a tad bit better. Maybe put them in stanzas as well. Other wise It was pretty good. Good luck and keep writing!! -
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Thanks for your comments - they are appreciated, however the middle align and continuous nature was intentional - I wanted it to keep going without breaks, so it would grow with a snowball effect. I toyed with the idea of leaving out all punctuation, but I'm generally not a big fan of that!!
Cheers.
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I think this would better read if left-aligned and not centered as you have it. Other than that: a nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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Interesting poem..i enjoyed reading a lot..i especially loved the ending, the way it flowed was amazing
Let me scream
I am not that naive.
Get out of my way
I'll tell you no more,
whatever you say
I will shut this door.
It's over, it's finished
I want you no more.
Thank you for entering and good luck =)
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