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Sleep Dust

I hear the familiar sound of the alarm clock
which wakes me instantly
and for a fraction of a second
I feel the warm sunshine
through the window,
and the dust of sleep
still sprinkling it's magic over my thoughts
as all in life seems good
and the shadow of a smile creeps over my lips
and then
reality hits me
like a hammer to a nail.

I climb out of bed reluctantly
Not wanting to start this day or any
filled with a foreboding that not even I understand,
having no direction,
knowing what needs to be done:

My work list
My chores
My tasks
with no reason.

Breakfast, shower,
fresh fragrance following my path.

And then realizing
all the everyday, routine things
are what makes life;
as tedious and dull as they may seem.

But what measures excitement and elation
without the scale of opposition?

And my smile returns without it's shadow.

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  • Hungry Joe
    May 5, 2008

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    I quite like this, without actually quite understanding it. I get the feeling a lot, the pointless happiness which gets worn down and reverses like mindless bi-polar, those times when all the emotions are shallow, either way. Don't quite get the 'and the shadow of a smile creeps over my lips' 'And my smile returns without it's shadow' thing, the shadows seems to have differant meanings. Unless both shadows are the mindless ironic deja' 'vu joy thing, and the shadowless one is the weaker, confident one. In which case it works well. Yes, very good. (you can see why I don't comment often.)


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    'and the dust of sleep
    still sprinkling it's magic over my thoughts'

    'reality hits me
    like a hammer to a nail.'

    These lines stuck out to me the most. And my favorite part is the ending, the realization, and the ending line:
    And my smile returns without it's shadow

    Without its shadow Awesome and fullfilling write! Best of luck to you in the contest!





  • Winterbirdie
    April 24, 2008

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    Oh man! I know exactly how that feels, lying in bed in the morning and thinking "What a great day!" and then realizing that there are so many things that have to be done and accomplished, and I don't feel up to the task at all. It really does feel "like a hammer to a nail." As OhEmetophobia said, I really like the transitions that you make in this piece. It was so smooth and full of rising emotions! I love the ending, because you realize that you can't have happiness if you haven't experienced some of the tedious things in life. And then you are able to smile freely, without depressing thoughts hampering you. Well done! Great write, and good luck in this contest! =D


  • broken-colours
    April 22, 2008

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    "I feel the warm sunshine
    through the window,
    and the dust of sleep
    still sprinkling it's magic over my thoughts
    as all in life seems good
    and the shadow of a smile creeps over my lips"

    I love the range of emotions you go through in this poem. First a dreamful state, then harsh reality takes its toll, then once you've had a chance to reacclamate yourself with the world, things don't seem as bad as you thought. I really liked this. Thanks for entering.