The vine streams under
lotus flower, blossoms wide
like submission of
a purposeful heart.
Quietly, as everything
continues its function
and day moves into night
and dreams drop from another star.
Blessing like liquid coursing
railroads of life,
and I once wistful calling
upon endangered emotions;
yet they reveal themselves
and pinch my side -
I am Alive.
I read the books
and underlined
unfamiliar words
to realize
that I write
my own chapters.
Days pass and once
blurred lines now have
advanced to clarity.
I grasped not for anything
but live this hour,
moment and time;
and revel in the
Now.
A contest entry
- Write what's on your heart. by broken-colours.
500 points, ended May 5, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wish I had more time to comment on this on. 
This one speaks volumes. Write on, you writing beast. One.
Dez
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Wow, I just absolutely love this piece, for transformation and understanding along with release of old, into the new, this moment IS!
I read the books
and underlined
unfamiliar words
to realize
that I write
my own chapters.
Amazing! Best of luck in the contest!
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Thank you so much for the beautiful comment. Yes, you described it perfectly...A transforamtion!
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The moment is here. The power of it is rich!
I appreciate this poem. I think it is one of your best.
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You always write such stunning poetry with such emotion in it. This was beautifully written. Well done with this; loved it.
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Thankyou so much beautiful Kiran!
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Beautiful, stunning. I find I must whisper the words and when I am done I let the silence go on for minutes. I have to read it again, and yet again. This one exists in a world all its' own and draws the reader into that timeless world frozen between breaths -- between heartbeats.
What an excellent poem. Good luck on the contest -- but this one is gold in my book in any case.
CaliOkie
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Wow, thank you so much for the beautiful comment and support. These words are truly from the heart!
Again, thnak you.
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Well John, thank you for the comment. This poem states that no matter what we go through in our lives...life continues and its beautiful if we take awarness to heart and see the beauty contained.
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I feel so...
enlightened when I read your work. It's as if you hold a class on how to view the world, but leave it up to each 'student's ' intrepetation. Well done, again.
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Wow. This was beautiful. I don't know if you meant to or not but the poem starts out a little blurry and gains clarity as it reads which is perfect for the subject you describe in it. I think we all have been there at some point. I can identify with this poem on some very personal levels. Pieces of my past seem foreign to me as if something happened that shielded me from them and then something will happen now and poof! all is clear again. Most importantly, purpose is clear again.
Ok, I'm rambling. You've put me in an introspective mood. Thanks.
One Love,
John
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The first few stanzas had imagery that left me breathless, yet I had a bit of trouble grasping their meaning. But the last stanza brought everything into stark clarity and gave the rest of the poem closure. Beautiful expression of yourself; I really enjoyed it. Thanks for entering.
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