There is/ was a middle aged poet,
who suffered depression, you know ???.
He went to get treatment,
& survived not eaten;
today he writes bad poems,
but stow that bull-
Isn't it my write to be right but still wrong?
& if any thing I don't want to come off trite.
If it's original, still it's a thin sin,
to share anything not a la Derrida'.
gah! But--oh...
If you concur with me that I'm less than you had hoped for,
I'll tell you it's better than morose.
I write to recover a luuuuhhhver
cleaning my shmuck--
At least I'm striving ...
Author notes
ii dealing with depression, using humor and a traditional doggerel form.
Former stanza:
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I write to recover
from a fighter to a lover.
At least I'm just a little bit rad...
A contest entry
- Depression by Friday.
525 points, ended May 6, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Maybe the best way to say thanks is to be real, to do good for the one whom you wish to thank
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As much of a wonderfully different and unique take on the contest as this was, I did ask for no end line rhyme
That said, thank you very much for writing for me, and with such a different point of view
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Oh how embarrassing; here, please accept my apologies and a revision
What was the little bad elf? The one who helped Harry Potter and got freed from elf trafficking?
Me, bad poet! Let me walk on fired coals and glass shards for you! I repent!
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Thank for for the wonderful revision.
It made my day
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Yes, be real
What a refreshing idea, to be real. And to do good for someone...what a novel concept. -
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Susan, please accept my sincere apologies for all hurts; let me do good for you my love
Nothing new under the sun.
But still a good idea, methinks.
Kiss kiss.
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I write to recover
from a fighter to a lover.
At least I'm just a little bit rad...
we all go through rough times and thats how we know what real happiness is..
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Shokrun wa jezaghallah!
Yes...
Today I got a wonderful gift in the mail, and also blessings to help pay off my truck repair! Thank the Holy One! Alhamdullilah!
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