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All your fears have said goodnight

What fills those sleepless nights will cries,
hush my child..Hear my lullaby.

The world will hush your terror screams,
as i fill you with these dreams.

The monsters quiet as the fairies appear,
they scoot away your night filled fears.
"My dearest child no need to cry..
Your guardians here..The monsters have gave there goodbyes"

The fog and clouds gather round,
as they listen among there make believe town,
they listen to the angel sounds....
The child coo's as he lays his head down.

"Sweet little boy oh please do not fear,
These night terrors are nothing,
For they will soon disapear."

The child lifts his head from this beautiful dream..
He silently smiles, For he likes what hes seen.
the words stay in his head through the night.
No longer afraid of his fears and his frights.

"My dearest child no need to cry...
All your fears have said goodbye."

Author notes

This one was chose by picture number one, it looks more like the princess is frightened, bot happy to be leaving the "ball" like shes runing through the night and it fears her...

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  • drcosmic
    January 16

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    Interesting

    At one point in my life, i suffered recurring nightmares, (Sometimes they come back) so I think I understand this peice. The imagery is quite vivid here, and the atmosphere is beautifully done.
    The dreams that haunt us, no matter how horrid, are part of the total experience that makes us who we are. to deny them is to deny a part of ourselves... and yet, to accept them is to allow a part of us to die within them.
    it can be a difficult choice to make.
    i feel this is the foundation of this poem...
    of course, if could be wrong.
    either way... well done!


  • crystallynnbradford
    June 18, 2008

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    i enjoyed reading this piece...a different take on what I am used to reading, which is good...i like the rhyme scheme too...beautiful job


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    June 6, 2008
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    Aww this was a beautiful and heartfelt write. Such a treasure to read! Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • broken-colours
    May 2, 2008

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    Very nicely done. Some lines I feel could have been worded a bit better, but mostly it's haunting yet sweet at the same time. Thanks for entering.


  • rainwalker
    April 30, 2008

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    Love the idea of this but you need to work on the wording because there are some very awkward lines. I would also suggest that you shorten some of the lines or set it up into small 6-word or less lines and stanzas to clean up the page and make it look a little more organized.

    In those first 2 sentences you should try to find another word for hush because when you repeat the same word so close together it makes the reader go back and breaks the flow of the entire piece.

    "My dearest child no need to cry..
    Your guardians here..The monsters have gave there goodbyes"

    for this I would suggest a big change because it is hard to read and hard to understand. For example:

    My dearest child, no need to cry...
    your guardian's arrived...
    The monsters all have gone
    and given their final goodbyes.

    or something like that. I hope that you will take these suggestions as they are intended, they are only my opinion but I hope that you can rework this a bit because I see great potential here. Thank you for entering and keep on writing!

    -Laura

  • Hypocritical Oath
    April 28, 2008

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    Great

    This is a great write, at first I'm taken with the view that it's about a child...which can be understood I'm sure, though I wonder if there is a hidden meaning in it all, and the child is only a reference point?


  • Topaze gold member
    April 28, 2008
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    A wonderful piece that I found to be very touching. Well Done


  • Blooming Poet
    April 27, 2008

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    This is amazing. I really enjoyed what you had to say, I appreciate you reaching out to encourage me.


  • deadheartedkitty
    April 23, 2008

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    beautiful

    i would give anything to sooth his fears some nights it seems that nothing works though...this was verry well put togeather...good luck to you


  • onapedestalIstand
    April 21, 2008

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    this is a truly goo work you have entered..but i did ask for death!!thanks for entering=] kitty24


  • Forever in his arms
    April 21, 2008

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    Wow lovely and truly beautiful i like this one its hopefull. umm... it didnt make me hate the feeling so ya i loved it

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