Life rushing by
Whirl wind of color
..Of memories
You stand there
A block in life
Defying the evident
Clutching those moments
Never relinquishing
Your grasp
Your body
Old and withered
Its time to let go
Your mind
Confused and lost
Its time to let go
Relax yourself
Compose yourself
Lie back
Float along
Drop off
The edge
Your life...
...Has now ended
Author notes
Hmmm...I'm trying to improve the ending...especially the last line...any suggestions?
Pic inspired! Pic by Mary J. Maxam
"Line Dance"
http://www.marymaxamartworks.com/gallery.htm
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest. by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended April 24, 2008, 11 entries
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3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1668 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh... What a tragic ending
Loved the step like flow to this. Thank you for entering my contest. 
Delila
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I like the ending actually, it was good! I don't know if you need the ...'s though. But it was also a cool poem and well written too, nice work!
*KT*
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Ahhh what a fantastic take on the picture!! I love this, even though it's talking about letting go and giving in to death, it is done with such softness!
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woahhh you amaze me yet again!! im speechless this has so much emotion and the image you create is beautiful..
im not sure if it goes with the picture but it was really good anyway!
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