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Let go

Life rushing by
Whirl wind of color
..Of memories

You stand there
A block in life
Defying the evident

Clutching those moments
Never relinquishing
Your grasp

Your body
Old and withered
Its time to let go

Your mind
Confused and lost
Its time to let go

Relax yourself
Compose yourself
Lie back

Float along

Drop off

The edge

Your life...

...Has now ended

Author notes

Hmmm...I'm trying to improve the ending...especially the last line...any suggestions?

Pic inspired! Pic by Mary J. Maxam
"Line Dance"
http://www.marymaxamartworks.com/gallery.htm

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    April 24, 2008

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    Oh... What a tragic ending Loved the step like flow to this. Thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • StarIlluminated
    April 22, 2008

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    I like the ending actually, it was good! I don't know if you need the ...'s though. But it was also a cool poem and well written too, nice work!
    *KT*


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    Ahhh what a fantastic take on the picture!! I love this, even though it's talking about letting go and giving in to death, it is done with such softness!


  • ucancallmereal
    April 21, 2008

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    woahhh you amaze me yet again!! im speechless this has so much emotion and the image you create is beautiful..
    im not sure if it goes with the picture but it was really good anyway!