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I Want You

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On a king-size bed, and totally naked please

Atop fresh cotton sheets, with summer breeze

Caressing our bodies as we playfully entwine

Savoring every moment as we take our time.

 

Sigh for me again, like your breath is on fire

For satisfying your dreams is my only desire

And after we have indulged and fallen asleep

We’ll cuddle together, and slumber so sweet.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • LiMarie silver member
    May 1, 2008

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    MMmm Ah lovely, I know that feeling, you've brought me right into that room.. that moment, and I love "sigh for me again like your breath's on fire" The whole poem gives such a wonderful warm safe feeling..


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Very lusty indeed! Yet always touched with beauty, the way you write sensual is always a treat to read! Love the ending! Cute


  • Amera gold member
    April 22, 2008
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    This says it all. Love following a passionate encounter. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    April 22, 2008

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    Ohhhh

    Niiice work Dad

    I held contest with this pic in it once I am sure..It is a great picture and your words match and take it to a great place


    Hope you do well in the contest



    Cin


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    VERY sensual, very loving, very beautiful... man! I have a thing for white linen sheets too, lol. This one pulled a big smile from deep within me - sighs!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    It seems the other ladies have all stated the effect your words had on them so I'll just compliment you on the natural flow of your rhyming and wish you the best of luck in the contest.

    Love Margaret

  • XxKrazyBeautifulxX
    April 21, 2008

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    very sensual & passionate...with these words you can draw any woman in! lol ; sinful indeed...the picture just makes it more imaginable* and the vibe i am getting from this poem is very sexy


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    Yet again, you brought a fully-blossomed smile to my face, and re-inspired my reverie in love and passion.
    I have said it before, I'll say it a hundred times more, you are the best romantic writer I have ever seen.
    This was fantastic. It was masterfully written, with flawless rhyme and meter, and lovely imagery.
    Good luck to you, brother!


  • Heavens Child
    April 21, 2008

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    oooooh la la.......... very hot! You know how to draw a woman in and make her want to be the one in those arms. Best wishes in the contest.


  • Brazos silver member
    April 21, 2008

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    Very sensual, very descriptive.

    Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.

    Novy and Brazos

  • ashjoe76
    April 21, 2008

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    Excellent

    Truly sensuous. The picture adds to the mood in an unobstrusive way.My favourite lines:
    Sigh for me again, like your breath is on fire

    For satisfying your dreams is my only desire

    congrats and best regards!


  • tara wilson gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    I really like your tone of voice in this poem, it is like strong, sexy arms carrying me into that king size bed LOL - j/k


    an awesome, sensual poem this is; a very sweet ending

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