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Guilty Of Love

I offered my love;
and the best there was in me.
I opened my arms;
Let you keep me warm.
I welcomed you in my heart;
But I ended up in tears.

Now I'm asking you if this
is my punishment for loving you ?
Was it a crime to be addicted to you ?
The deep pain that it costs,
It's unbearable.
My wounds run deep inside
the sorrow grew within

My soul craved for your love
How could I ever stop my heart
from beating for you ?
I wish this love could turn into hatred,
but I can't look into your eyes
and not wanting you.

This broken heart of mine,
still beat at the sound of your voice.
How could I ever stop wanting you ?
Two hearts bind forever,
you will eternally live inside.

Can't you see
The love shinning through my eyes ?
My soul whispering to you ?
You stole my heart with a smile
You lifted me up with a kiss

I know you will never be mine
I will die alone and unloved
There is nothing left for me,
in this cruel world.

I lost the battle,
Tonight was my last fight.
I would release the pain locked in my heart,
And my soul would fly free.
Free as the birds in the sky
Free as a leaf falling from a tree
Free as the wind travel form place to place

I must be free
No more pain, no more tears.
I cried for your love,
but now I know it was not meant to be
I'll put an end to all pain
swirling around me.

Since you have found me guilty,
My love must be a crime.
It is my punishment to leave this world.




















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  • geetarrstarr
    May 26

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    Good!

    I think it's a good poem, very solid.

    I love the first stanza. Simply love it. Something about it just popped in my mind and I kept thinking about how much I liked it when I was reading the rest.

    The second stanza I'm not so sure about. It started out awkward for me (I'm not sure why), but as the poem progressed I liked it somewhat more because it fits very well.

    The rest of it was good. I could imagine it and I like how you were comparing freedom to all those things.

    So, other than some spelling errors, there's nothing I can really critique you on. Good job !


  • crazyash007
    July 9, 2008

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    wonderfull piece of work.....i like poems that dont have to make me open my dictionary lol......the words were simple yet meaningful.....Free as a "leave" falling....(leaf isnt it???)

    wonderful and gr8......its something that most of us all think about when we are tired of it all.....gud work


    • uniiquegirl
      July 9, 2008
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      Thanks for taking the time to read and comment my work...I really appreciate it...

      Yes it is "leaf"..lol..I never realized that...thanks for pointing it out

      I'm glad that you enjoyed it


  • petrichor
    April 21, 2008

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    i love this poem, it's all the questions we ask ourselves when we've been hurt by love. and my god they are just things i don't think many people will ever face up to answering.

    'I must be free
    No more pain, no more tears.
    I cried for your love,
    but now I know it was not meant to be
    I'll put an end to all pain
    swirling around me.'

    I adored this verse. Exactly what I felt when I went through heart break. The ending was good, a very good closing.

    <33

    • uniiquegirl
      April 21, 2008
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      Thanks for the wonderful comment!!!!
      I am so glad that you took your time to read and comment my work ...Glad someone can relate...thanks again

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