No sound
Only my heart beat
Faster and faster
I am alone
In this dark room
They are out there
Those whom I don't know
They scare me
What do they want?
I'm just a young girl
Thoughts run threw my mind
tears down my cheeks
It's raining outside now
What a beautiful sound
My heart,
And the rain
Making a song
the song of beauty and fear
Shawdows under the door
words being spoken
can't undersand them
What are they saying?
Heart pounding now
Breathing hard
The beautiful song
Now is chaos
As the door cracks open
It all stopped
Rain still pouring
Just no sound
No more beats from my heart
Slowly the door opens
Shaking wildly
Can't breath
Then....
the door slamed shut
Author notes
The theme is a young girl who has been kidnaped she doesnt know why or by who.
My AP name is Jeseejoy
A contest entry
- For all of you Brilliant young Poets...20 and under.... by islekine.
750 points, ended June 8, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Interesting unique theme!
My hear??? don't understand that line...maybe meant I hear? would have liked a little more depth....but all in all a good poem....also thoughts run THROUGH...not threw .....also should end in the same tense...door slams shut.....you leave a lot to a person's imagination....which can be good...but in this case would have liked a bit more! Best wishes in the contest...final scores at judging...
Write on!
*PEACE*
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oh my bad it was supossed to say my heart not my hear.
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im a little confused on what this is about but i loved how you layed it out great job it hit me strong!
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It's about a girl that has been kidnapped and has no idea were she is or why she's there. I'm working on a second part to this one also
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Jessica this is by far one of my favorites of yours its way good. i love the way you word it and the whole idea behind it.
#ACE#
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