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If you open the book, she will come

 

 

 

A journey starts in several ways; mostly, with a beginning.

Steps falter then walk, small sounds evolve ways of holding hands,

arms, head face-up towards lightness.
Mondays prepare the week to become undone; usually forgotten by Tuesday,
let me speak to you of days when I was lost, the wilderness blew and the paper in my book was torn.

I wish for you to mark my pages, where the psalms present and precipitate a time
for knowledge and growth. You are not only the teacher but student,
not only the water but dried flowers waiting for rain. In this, you are known to me.

I strive to unclothe the moon and stars
speak to you of the brightside. As the calendar is marked by thoughts and deeds.

Today, we talked of change, the need for expression and how to write plumes in mid-air.

 

 

 









 

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  • layla.
    April 26, 2008

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    this is so soothing. WOW. i am floored. i loved three of those blocks... very very well written. good luck.


  • Wandika gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Interesting

    It would seem that much is on and off your mind as of late.

    Still your poetry is rock solid.


  • misselaineous
    April 23, 2008
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    whatchimecallits and thingimebobs are good
    this is better

  • Suzanne Dia
    April 23, 2008
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    just by for another read.

    this is breathtaking, gill. so peaceful.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 23, 2008
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      sigh

      thank you

      gotten me a good teacher, just goes to show and old dotty bird can learn new tricks...


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    "I strive to unclothe the moon and stars
    speak to you of the brightside"

    What a light, a big one, shining from these words, Gilly. Simply marvelous, my friend.



    ~ Nicolette

  • Suzanne Dia
    April 22, 2008
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    More thingimibobs please.



    I like this, Gill. It isn't over-eager it is simple and slow..tender. I quiet request..




  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    April 22, 2008

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    Expressing a hunger in the open gateway of the path we yearn and try to walk, where we receive perfumes from the hidden. Beautiful 'write'.
    'the wilderness blew and the paper in my book was torn.'
    'I strive to unclothe the moon and stars' Mmmm!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 22, 2008
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      Thanks G, your comments raise me up and make me smile
      thank you my friend



  • Nam
    April 22, 2008

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    I'm quite sure this would have been a better read without the adverts. Anyway .. enough about me. I usually do not like prose for the fact that those who write it don't usually write it well (of course this is in reference to us amateur writers bantering about) but I must admit this was pretty good. Kept my attention, didn't unfocus in the imagery, and though it was quite short, if it were longer I'm quite sure my mind wouldn't wander off as it usually does.

    -Nam

    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 22, 2008
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      wow, thank you David, coming from you that is praise indeed - thank you so much

      I like your meadering mind


      Gill.x


  • Elora Danon gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    Sigh


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    Is it Monday already?...lol

    plumes in midair...yes



    al

  • tara wilson gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    "I strive to unclothe the moon and stars
    speak to you of the brightside."

    this is a sigh poem. I love this. The second stanza/part being my favorite...

    "I wish for you to mark my pages" ...this is so beautiful


  • Shannon
    April 21, 2008

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    "how to write plumes in mid-air"

    That's just wonderful. Lovely line.

    I know of these whatchamacallits, but you explain them much more beautifully than I could.

  • Philogos gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    Beutiful imagery. I particularly like the mysterious 'you' addressed in the second and third parts.

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