the love i feel for you
my light, my WORLDS gone down the drain
the fragrence of Heather wafts through my window
but open still my unsewn wounds
this ode warns sorrow on love without
the one whos loved
let me die...
a sympathetic loner
cries written tears
all for you, my love, my strife
i empty out my hollow stains
from veins long cut
from thoughts unchained
I give you this , unspoken word
I love your glance,
your sutle prose,
your laugh, your smile, my carefree nest
my thoughts burn black from acid tears left from death
I spent in years
and now the love i held by a thread
has left me now
for lost ,the dead.
A contest entry
- Your Absolute Best Prewrite by Heavens Child.
800 points, ended April 25, 2008, 48 entries
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Awwwwwwwwwwww it's a love poem! So cute. Well written. Worlds should be World, though. Slight typo there, unless it's meant to sound a bit funny? I'm sorry that she's dead, though. I know how much a lost love hurts. I've had many of my cloest friends && family die and my heart still yearns for them. GREAT write. Heartfelt.
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thank you heh but she didnt die she left me im dead sorry for the misunderstanding she left me with the words bye forever so she's lost to me till death
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ilike this. it feels like me sometimes when i have no friends and i look at all the dark and miserable pieces of myself and somehow, find comfort in my imperfection.
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I give you this , unspoken word
I love your glance,
your sutle prose,
your laugh, your smile, my carefree nest
my thoughts burn black from acid tears left from death
I spent in years
and now the love i held by a thread
has left me now
for lost ,the dead.
love it....this poem is sooo good....i have fallen in love but he ripped my heart out two years ago and now he wont give it back....but what is funny is that when i finally start to get over him he does something to pull me right back and i hate it....keep up the good work....
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This is very deep and dark. I really like the flow of this piece and the subtle rhyming. Thank you for your entry.
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thats really sweet with lots of beautiful words! really poweful ending. well done x
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