Forces linked in common bond to flutter
ominous deeds rupturing all;
calling for upheaval.
Total taken by call
of the wild, and forces bent on man ruts.
So unbelievable.
Leaving clues,
wrapping wet tears,
rapt attention forcing pain.
Insane is the motley crew assigned cuts
of people flesh, rallying tall.
Falling mute terror leaves.
Tense wars vibrate shoddy rivals.
Critical curves of wrap-up muttering
quick take downs; relieving
rev ice blues.
Hidden swirl's fears,
threatens trapped lone-freedom train.
Rain acid induces consequences.
Defences reflecting night's edged offense.
Author notes
Individualtean Form Poetry (created by; Ian sawiki)
A contest entry
- Invitation only by individuality.
1000 points, ended April 21, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Overlook made up words
Comments
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Totally taken by call - i am counting seven syllables here, it needs to be six
To/tall/y ta/ken by call
Intense wars vibrate shoddy rivals. - i am counting nine here, it needs to be eight
In/tense wars vi/brate shod/dy ri/vals.
relieving
wild fire blues.
i am not seeing the rhyme with relieving and wild
Rain acid induces dire consequences. - i am seeing 11 here, rather than ten
Rain ac/id in/du/ces dire con/se/quen/ces.
one thing i will say i like the way you kept to rhyme with the flutter etc yet moved it different too so it sounds free.
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