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Dreams Within Dreams

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Dreams Within Dreams

Now close your eyes and imagine your dream
and you’ll realize your mind is supreme
Winged steeds, that unite in  your mind
Unicorn flight, of the mystical kind
Nocturnal flying breeds, enter your soul
Imagining visions within sight; and control
Children ride unicorns with moonbeam speed
One silver horn with wings of might; indeed
Romantic magic deeds, put light in your dreams
Nature’s delight of the flight of moonbeams
Winged steeds, that shed light in your eyes
Dreams in the night when you realize

 

 

 

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Prompt: 12 lines only, rhyming verse.

This fantasy verse is composed with an internal rhyme and an internal acrostic rhyming Rictameter. (dreams within dreams, poems within poems)
Rhyme scheme aabb…
Internal rhyme abab…
Rictameter rhyme abab…


Art Work by: kenket

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  • Ellis gold member
    February 8
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    Utterly Unique

    Only you could have thought this up.


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 4, 2008

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    So much written into one piece. I love cleaver pieces where one poem can be one or more. I love the fact you used two different colors, it helps clarify the two within one. Then by adding an acrostic you've reached into 3 different pieces.

    You certainly carried me away in your mystical ride. Excellent Job!!!


  • Ithica silver member
    April 28, 2008

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    How on earth do you do it??? You can turn a prompt into a Turkish puzzle and STILL it comes out as a perfect poem... A full on fantasy work of art!!! I better bookmark this one... I may learn something here... Note: It could take a while


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    April 22, 2008

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    excellent~~

    A beautiful and enchanting poem
    I finally got my title to show up for this contest
    TY for helping me...best of luck in the contest
    Hope you come give mine a read as well
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • albymyheart gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    You Can't Beat This!

    OMG! You never cease to amaze me! I have never seen anything like this before. Not only a poem within a poem but separate rhyme sequences! There must be no other poet as good as you.

    The colours helped alot to define the form, without it I think its intricacy would go un-noticed. And even the yellow section forms a shape. This is just unbelievable.

    Oh yeah, I liked what it had to say too, but I'm just awe-stuck at the form.

    Please IM me what a rictameter is. I've heard of it, but not sure what it consists of.

    Thank you for showing us where poetry can lead.
    alby


  • Desire gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    Oh My Word~~

    What in the heaving hills

    Now I saw word: Rictameter~
    How You do that
    So You have an internal-external rhyme
    and Rictameter
    PLUS~ Acrostic~
    I know You created another form...but heck...
    I have not seen this before and soooooooooooo
    What name might You call this one...
    I imagine this has Your name all over it
    New Form yes?

    and did I tell You I Love this
    Winged steeds, that unite in your mind
    Unicorn flight, of the mystical kind
    Nocturnal flying breeds, enter your soul
    Imagining visions within sight; and control
    Love these lines~Magnificent!!

    You so turned me on to separate color for emphasis on different form...
    Thank You Teacher
    Wow~ I will be coming back to inhale this again

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    April 22, 2008
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    Exceedingly clever. I love the concept of poem within poem being dream within dream. Fantastic.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    April 22, 2008

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    The metaphoric use of this poem was already so magical and enchanting, the fact that you wrote such a lovely poem makes it all just sparkle. This luminous piece deserves a trophy! Really very lovely! I love the picture and the colors. it all comes together very well.

    All the best for the contest!!
    Becks


  • HaleyMary
    April 21, 2008

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    This was beautiful, Sis. I liked the use of the two different colors for the words. Unicorns are beautiful creatures, even though they are fictional. Wonderful poetic form, as always. You are very talented. Best of luck in the contest.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    well done. I am very impressed.

    Thanks for sharing.

     

    Love

    Passions


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 21, 2008
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    Clever write-well thought out too-work of art.
    Love Hilly


  • StarEyes
    April 21, 2008

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    Ok, you just totally blew my mind away with this one!! I love every word of this magical write!!! OMG!!!! You always blow my mind, and this time, wow! clean out of the water!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    I don't think you need luck, but hey a little never hurts

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Anemone-Rose
    April 21, 2008

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    ooooooohhhhh nice. I like the way you were able to use the word unicorn in your poem that added to its greatness alot. great write.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    That will take a little time to emulate, I shall contemplate.
    Wonderful artistry within a beautiful poem.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    A beautiful piece of artistry...

    Love
    Sue


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    Brilliant!


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    What can I say?
    Its fabulous!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    Very intricate, Sis.

  • Papagallo
    April 21, 2008

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    My goodness, you are most talented. I see how you worked your poem. What a great job. This poem ould be a winner! Papagallo

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