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Haiku - Chirp

Passing storm frightens
foetal petal waiting sun,
spring bird's chirp brightens

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Magnolia
http://flickr.com/photos/9298216@N08/2351787874/

Background
http://flickr.com/photos/bernardm/2367386396/

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  • Glonus
    August 6

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    I thought that it captured what you were getting at very well without being very long (i.e nature of the haiku) and I thought it was quite good.

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  • sassykitty
    August 5

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    Excellent haiku, this so vividly captures the essence of the season. Really liked the 'foetal petal waiting sun' - a very powerful line. I found this a beautifully evocative write. Thanks for sharing.

  • whos my humblepie
    June 27

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    I love the little birdy in the background
    I can see the relationship between the photo and the haiku.
    Nice job

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  • azure85 gold member
    April 23

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    Passing storm frightens
    foetal petal waiting sun,
    spring bird's chirp brightens...

    Your AHA moment is delightful, thank you so much for a lovely nature haiku.

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  • marlene47 silver member
    April 23
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    It's all beautiful.
    Marlene

  • janejainejayne gold member
    April 21
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    pleasure!

    The whole thing
    words and spring
    pleasure bring!

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