They can feel the chemistry between them,
The love in the air.
They can see it in each other's eyes,
But they know they must not care.
They long to feel each other's touch,
To get lost in each other's eyes.
They long for what is forbidden;
In other people's eyes.
They know they could have one night,
One day,
One chance.
But they can tell;
If they held on,
They would never let go.
They steal glances at each other from across the room,
Across the road,
Across the world.
They know they mustn't,
But more and more,
The pain of separation
Is breaking them down.
They assumed the distance would not cause any pain
They forgot that absence makes the heart grow fonder
They know it is forbidden,
Taboo.
But they know that it is real,
It is them,
Just the two.
They know it is forbidden,
But they think to run away.
They know it is forbidden,
But they just want one day.
They know it is forbidden,
But they need to love each other.
They know it is forbidden;
But it is better to have loved and lost,
than never to have loved at all.
A contest entry
- Forbidden Lovers PIC Prompt by trinajean.
400 points, ended May 11, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Anything I should change?
Comments
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I forgot to add applause! Oh noez!
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Wow, I really enjoyed reading this. The way you interpret it relies on how the reader is feeling at the time. Whether it's about a lost love, an affair or maybe just something due to religion etc. holds them back from being able to love each other. I especially enjoyed lines 15-17 about how they stare at each other across the room then you expand to across the road and finally to across the world, it plunges the reader straight into how the two people must feel, knowing they're so close and yet so far apart.
I really enjoy reading your poems because I can't ever identify any room for improvement.
Keep up the great writing.
Scott -
awesome
I love this poem! It sounds like me when i fell "in love" with this boy named james but the thing is we never got a chance to be together cause I transfered schools and I never saw him again so I lost. hint: It wasn't true love because I'm to young for that but it was a big big crush.
bye,star
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I really liked the repition of the one sentence "They know it is forbidden", kit gave the poem a sadder tone which is great because it is somewhat of a sad topic. xD
Great Job and Good Luck in the contest!
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