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Try To Remember

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Infant angel peers at her spirit world, born for a planet of blue
She's bound to leave this lush green and the crystalline river falls
Soaring through rainbow and illy orbs, twirling stars onward she flew
Holding fast to a mane of snowy light as she visits memories to recall

The beauty of love mans greatest treasure, of learning in heaven's care
but the dress of white now aged in aeon, has turned to a river of tears
and the woodland is sand, God seems so far, she cannot remember it there
Prayers lose might, its dim where she is and her love has faded to fear
~

Heaven has no time, though she suffers, her spirit mare misses her so
although she believes nothing has wings, he sends her a feather to know


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  • PhoenixFaith
    June 6, 2008
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    Hoodwinked

    I know I am a day late on this and I am sorry. This piece is beautiful and goes amazing with that picture. If there wasn't a picture it would still have been just as beautiful with the imagery you have here. Great job fellow poet keep it up.

    Always write from the heart
    Never give up
    Kate


  • Desire gold member
    April 23, 2008
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    Ooooooooooooooooooh just a reminder, please in the AC...credit Photobucket for the picture
    Thankies

  • Desire gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Try To Remember
    This piece tugged at the Heartstrings and
    for some reason I was seeing~
    like Alice in Wonderland looking glass
    ~
    the scene where she sees herself next to the tree...
    looking through a clear mirror
    also~ was seeing word: Christmas
    and getting word: vivid...seems like an account of
    a special event~
    in tangent with a Birthday too~
    feels more like a slumber party-childhood
    experience.... So many images flooding in
    Ooooh..Wanted to verify a word
    With this line: Soaring through rainbow and illy orbs,
    ....illy...did You mean lilly?
    I understood what You meant
    Love the rhyme and tale told

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    The beauty of love mans greatest treasure, of learning in heaven's care.
    but the dress of white now aged in aeon, has turned to a river of tears,
    and the woodland is sand, God seems so far, she cannot remember it there.
    Prayers lose might, its dim where she is and her love has faded to fear.
    Excellent take on the prompt~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    April 23, 2008
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    A beautiful but sad poem. A beautiful image and background also.