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Rotten fruit

The apple of your eye
you said ~
                     once
in a time when summer knew no end
and pretty ribbons
flowed like apron strings
from those curls you brushed with flawless hands

 

and now
as I peel back indifference
we drift apart
snapping at the core of ill-demise

never really knowing
when I fell
far enough from the tree

that my skin
would bruise

ever so slightly

leaving a shade of red

you couldn't stand...

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Prompt ~ Apple skin

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  • exalted
    May 13

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    wonderful
    a well deserved gold, congrats, the imagery and overall poem is stunning

    -cassidy


  • Faithbound gold member
    April 21

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    This is exactly the type of piece I was looking for with this. You used it as a metaphor brilliantly. Thank you.
  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    April 21

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    this is amazing and is so beautifully written with such imagery in your words and uniqueness that is also outside of the box well done mummy


  • violet nights...
    April 21
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    I love this... The ending is perfection!