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Because


When you, from distant place,
chanced upon the vast blue
of my eyes

didn't they dance as brilliant jewels?

And while extending ear
to hear the twinkle in starlit heavens
but stumbling, rather, upon
the soft reverberation
of my two, half-moon lips,

didn't the thirst
that rides their every breath
call to you?

And when you thought to seek out flower in bloom
but allowed your gaze to rest, instead,
upon my supple breasts,

couldn't you sense their swelling?


How, then, do tender thoughts go unanswered,
and eager words so quickly become suppressed
by cold indifference
and long

silence?

Why then, as dust or ash,
or even lint upon your dark shoulder,
am I so easily cast aside?
 


. . . perhaps so eyes can swoon to fuller music,
and lips can pause to sip a deeper drink,
and so breasts, overcome with ardent richness,
might somehow rise to touch a higher knowing! . . .

or perhaps
only because

you won’t love me.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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PROMPTS: The Last Poem and Naked , by Manuel Bandeira (check them out on the contest page!!)

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  • evelynxxoo
    April 23, 2008

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    it reminded me of my first real crush when i was so deep in and he well it was a game to him and he was a better player but i learnt fast and got burned less awesome poem


  • Mirthryl
    April 22, 2008

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    Romance, it seems, has a limited fuse. If it fails to light the logs of love, it gutters and dies. Especially poignant, "why then, as dust or ash, or even lint upon your dark shoulder, am I so easily cast aside?" Then follow the wistful contemplations, and finally the acknowledgement that your free will trumps my eager wishes and dreams. Lovely write encompassing the desire to be loved and cherished.


  • voices
    April 21, 2008

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    have your cares become drifting leaves,
    to fall into forgotten crevice
    has time wilted petals that once made your eyes bounce

    there will be no other lines to follow the word
    silence will explain what comes after
    because...

    exceptional indeed.
    thankyou for your kindness.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    This poem sounds sad, but has images that give a soft touch to that sadness.
    So much longing here...

    Mari


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    I really, really love this one!!!


    I tried to choose favorite lines, but it was impossible! I ended up highlighting all of the poem...This is so amazing, truly...I do wish you all the luck in the contest but honestly, walking away with a poem like this in your possession is a reward in itself, I am bookmarking this. Reading this makes me want to start back up my poem of the week series sooner than planned!

    Lynda


  • secberm
    April 21, 2008

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    There's something about this that calls to me. Something I call "The Newness." Usually, puppy love. The beginning. But if you make it past that, then you're in "The Everyday" (where I think love lies--as in dwells.) Write on. One.

    Dez


  • Peteskid gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    There is a palpable sense of reaching and wanting in these verses; and questions, revolving upon deepest feelings, unrequited love and the risk of caring...exposing a bared self to another, without pause or pretense...asking; so very well done. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK


  • Cannonsfire
    April 20, 2008

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    Oh boy do I relate to this one. How come we are passed over when all we ever want is the best for another, yet they see it as a life sentence. I always though love in the moment should be pleasureable, why does it have to have a conscience attached to it lol Love, C

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