they make an incision along my throat
cutting the underside of my neck along my face
pulling away my skin
peeling me like layers to remove from my soul
they look underneath then cover my eyes with a cloth
they expose the grotesque hidden flesh
can they find me in the skin
an imprint of who i once was
will the blindfold provide a sense of dignity
ive been labelled branded with a number
"can you see the subjects bone structure"
the color of muscle and tissue
why am i a subject
they shred away my humanity
"the recently deceased is in perfect condition"
they cut away the attachment i held to my body
peeling back to remove the muscle from skin
the quiet snap of tissue being cut from bone
they gather around observing watching intently
taking notes as i am dissected
my lungs and insides are removed and packaged
"the subject makes for perfect study"
their knives slicing me apart in stages
they watch as my hands are removed defleshed and boiled
i am stored in containers and jars preserved frozen and donated
"be sure tag and store for the next class"
What did you think
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That was... ... twisted. But I love it. I have got to say I have never read anything quite like this before. Your mind is soo awesome! Morbid, but awesome. I love it. I have actually been in one of those classes, it's bizarre.
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made my think about cosmetic surgery for my chin
and the flesh suit
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expressively morbid
This scared me, but in a good way lol. It was dark but wasn't angsty as a ridiculous amount of poems are, this actually managed to evoke true feeling and definitely kept my interest:]
I have a prob with this one line: "peeling me like layers to remove from my soul"
just don't think it sounds right somehow..maybe you could just say, "peeled in layers to remove from my soul.
You could also make the title more realistic sounding like, Subject No. 1
I dunno, besides these minor things this is a great and creative poem<3
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Another dark write. I felt like I was part of a lab exiperiment. Gruesome imagery and descriptions, thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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Hmmm
Hmm very disturbing but well written. Kinda dark but I like it. It kinda makes me think of some of Poe's work.
Good flow and its easy to read without being boringly simple. Great job.
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*shivers* What is it with you and scary, disturbing poetry lately? No really, I do like it. Great imagery *shiver* I especially like the last stanza. Awesome poem!
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