I went to visit the park one day
Early in the month of May
All the things that I did see
And the things that happend to me
Are what you now can read
A squirrel running on the ground
A band making the strangest sound
The scouts were building a brand new swing
Out of just about anything
I hope it works alright
A family had a picnic lunch
I noticed some possums having a munch
Of an apple skin they'd found
Somewhere in the park grounds
Maybe from the picnic
As the day faded away
I saw some ducks flying this way
A little girl was feeding them bread
A little boy looked ready for bed
To dream of things he'd seen
That was a very good day
I really should go back someday
And see if things have really changed
Or if it is just the same
Down at the local park.
A contest entry
- Alphabet Soup by Faithbound.
600 points, ended May 13, 8 entries
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Comments
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I appreciate your entry. However, the rhyme is not metered, and the last line of each stanza does not rhyme with the rest at all. I had a hard time flowing through it.
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A poem that creates big smiles!
See what you did to me? >>>>
I love your poem about the park, jacksm! 
It's filled with delightful images and happy imaginings. 
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