You'll know for sure
When you've chosen the right one
The person you love
The one you'll
Laugh with during the good
Cry with during the bad
Go hand in hand
Down the road to life
You'll know for sure
When you've chosen the right one
When each touch leads to smiles
When touching heads
form silhouettes in setting sun
When the gentle meeting of lips
allows you to open your eyes to blissful ones
You'll know for sure
When you've chosen the right one
When closeness force you to see nothing
But their gentle eyes
When you feel nothing
But their touch
When you smile at nothing
But their face
You'll know for sure
When you've chosen the right one
Make sure you do
For love is a terrible thing to waste
A heart,
Even worse.
Author notes
Lol just wanted to throw this out there. Been wanting to write something about this for a while. *cough cough* 4/12/08
A contest entry
- Titles part 2(more titles being added) by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended April 30, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks everyone for your feedback! Good luck to everyone else who has entered this contest!
I edited a line that I thought was a bit awkward and wrongly placed. Please, I am openminded to any kind of further critique! -
This is beautiful and so well penned. Loved this part:
You'll know for sure
When you've chosen the right one
When each touch leads to smiles
When touching heads
form silhouettes in setting sun
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I like this
I like this a lot. It reminds me of something I wrote before, but yours seems to have more creativity to it then mine does, or did. Well you have a nice day, Peace! -
its good
i dont noe u buti like this poem -
what a plain truth you are bringing in this verse..this is indeed a true and very tense statement..I love this honesty..well done
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Awww now I'm going to lose the contest (Just kidding, even though I probably will lose) The flow is great, and I like how the words sorta blend together. They're all separate words, but together they mean the same thing, if that at all makes sense. Great write and, really, good luck in the contest ^.^
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Lol losing to this thing? Not a chance. Thanks though. Good luck to you toos!
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