Sweet sounds of love echo in like air.
I whisper in your ear "can I touch you there?"
A smile creeps across your face
take my hands and place them like sweet grace.
Beads of sweat and tears of love
from both our bodies fitting like a glove.
Passionate kisses raining down on bare flesh.
Porcelain white skin of yours so fresh.
Lay you down, wipe your brow
ask you "can I love you now?"
Author notes
Prompt - "Can I touch you there?"
I would like to be either your sister or lover
leslielovesthomas
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A contest entry
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Comments
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nice sweet piece. good luck!
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oh i really liked this one wow gikves you a sweet taste and leaving you anting more
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Very nice I like it a lot!!! =) hehe sounds very nawty and other stuffs lol but I liked it lots. YAY!!! for a great write hehe.
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still loving this one.
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hey this is Dani...the judge of the contest. just to let you know that i do not know who you are...so if you know me please don't be upset if i leave you a comment that does not make you smile. it's just i'm judging this contest and i wanna be able to seek out the good and get rid of the bad. this was a joy to read. something sexual but not to the point that everyone notice. i seen that you won two contests from this poem in the same month. very good. best of luck to you....
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It is sensual dral
But you know I would be honest with you if it was needed..with this one..well rhyming in erotica doesn't work for me, but I do realise it is my own opinion and something that just rubs me the wrong way
I loved it cept the rhyming lol
Lov ya darl
congrat's on the trophies oyu have recieved on it
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Wow! This is very sensual and seductive. Probably one of the most sexiest "dirty pretties" I've ever read. You kept it clean but passionate. Very impressive work. It kinda leaves you wanting more. I saw alot of pleasure and sophistication hidden in this piece. That's what I love about poetry! You can somehow find the missing links to the puzzle, when they aren't really noticable. I'm just like blown away right now. I'm STILL thinking about this spicy poem. Wonderful job! And good luck in my contest!
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This obviously is very well done and a great use of ords or lack of them. The judges shall discuss your poetential and see if you make it to the next round.
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nice write, very sensual leave you wanting more. Beautiful
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Nice poem. Sensual and steamy. Good luck in the contest.
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Great writing and the flow of the words is great. You did a excellent job.
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50/50 for following rules
25/25 for overall poetic ability
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Reminds me of love in high school. or like first love making...great poem
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Loverly and beautiful.
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Steamy, sensual and passionate this piece is. Best wishes and thank you for your entry.
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aaw!! i liked this! very well penned! it made feel butterflies!! congrats on the bronze! thank you for wanting to be apart of my family!!
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great piece but not what i asked for... though i am not DQing anyone... so thanks for entering...
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sweet words...
Oh boy! did this press buttons for me... great piece filled with exotic passions... top marks... 'd'(david)
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OH! Now you can take a penned hand and lead it anywhere!
Just a wonderful entry!
Tang
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I like the liquid flow of this. I am impressed. WOW! Best of luck!
~Donna~
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aww les.. so sweet. achingly sweet.
interesting prompt. very interesting.
great UMPH with the last line. really gets me right in the heart.
Best of luck to ya!
Abby
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very sweet and tender. good luck in your contest.
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