Philip was a quiet boy who didn’t have much to say.
He was told he was adopted on his twenty first birthday.
In a strange way he felt incomplete and often in his dreams,
he felt lonely and isolated especially in his teens.
One day he met a pretty girl and at once they fell in love,
they were deliriously happy and thanked the lord above.
They had so much in common they were both adopted too,
they soon became inseparable as lovers often do.
They went everywhere together and vowed they’d never part,
their love for one another came from deep within the heart.
One day whilst in each others arms philip proposed to jill,
who gazed into his loving eyes and said of course I will.
Some time elapsed they set the date, at the chapel down the lane,
and the vicar who gave them both a smile said “Come in out of the rain”
They sat down in the vestry the vicar said for what it’s worth,
among other things I have to see, your certificates of birth.
Neither one, nor the other had seen them to this day,
as in every household they’d been “safely locked away.”
When later on the vicar spread them out,looked at them twice as though in doubt,Said you’d both be commiting mortal sins, don’t you know you both are twins.?
Jill said “Love like ours just can’t be wrong we feel it in our hearts so strong"
Phil said we don’t really need to wed, we can live and love together instead,"For our children’s sake we have an option we can get our children through adoption."
And so they’ve been happy right to this day, with a boy and girl “ Philip’s way”
Author notes
J U D M C Dont Die Live Life . Option 3 Forbidden love dianar87 devientart 85802153
Forbidden Love = Anything and Everything judmc
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very strange, and very good
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lol u never did do my change. Good poem, fits my criteria, and great ending. I really didnt expect to see humor in this type of contest- a nice change =]
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how ironic...i loved it though..well written and your rhymes were no where near forced..goodluck
-brookelee
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Hahaha. It is a pretty funny ending. Great twist.
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An excellent twisted poem with an unexpected ending.
A real pleasure to read. Best of luck, and thanks for entering my contest.
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Hey there, thanks for entering,
This poem is quite different but is still quite interesting. The constanting rhyming in every line of every stanza was very detracting and made it hard to concentrate on. I understand the theme of love but there is no obvious themes of death in this poem. The title, however, is quite catchy and enhances the poem.
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I love this its very um...interesting
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Amazing this was just absolutely incredible and i do agree that love shouldn't be based on age sex race or anything else that might get in the way...GL
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Whoa...
The ending I was NOT expecting at all.
Wow.
I guess Love,
really does conquer all!
Great write.
I Loved it.
*~Allison~*
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Although a little eratic in a couple of spots it was a great write and story.
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Wonderful!
This was really awesome...Thank you alot for entering
I loved it...i would have never guessed they were twinz yayyyyy!
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you didn't fail to deliver a twist.. i loved this.. thank u for entering!
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Woot woot
WOW. First of all i would just like to say, How totally awesome was that! That was really brilliant. Normally I don't like simple rhyme that has been overused by every other person, but the poem is so different that it can pull it off. However you did forget to use quotation marks when you said, . . . for what it’s worth,
among other things I have to see, your certificates of birth. . . .
Other than that it was great. The bad news is that it is a prewrite and has already won three other awards. But i did really like this so i might, JUST MIGHT, let it slide. but will see. Thanks for entering. -
weird, kinda disturbing but in a good way, i loved the twist that you put into it, thank you for entering ill take a second look at this one
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Crazy aweseome write!!!
I love this! I'm sure most people would freak if they found out that the person they truly loved was their twin or even just a sibling! I know I would, but this is wonderful that they decided that could just adopt and stay happy anyway. Beautiful job! Good luck in my contest!
~Koko~
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Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Little Girl's Fairy Tale"
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KokoluvsDaniel
Many thanks, Koko, for your kind comments on "Philip's Way" so glad you enjoyed it.Best Wishes George
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WOW!
I sure never expected that ending. It was a total surprise. I couldn't imagine having such a sad thing happen. Sometimes love endures the strangest odds. This is a well written poem and the rhyming is superb. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain
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mysty rain
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Philip's Way" so glad you
enjoyed reading it (I love happy endings) Best Wishes George
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Wow! This is a very, very sad and and weird poem. Weird in a good way! I enjoyed the read. Thank you so much for entering And good luck
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Well done and thank you for entering
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oh this is sooooo sad. I bet it happens more than not when it comes to closed adoptions tho. Good write.
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Ehhh...Kinda creepy and twisted but I loved it!
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i loved this. the rhyme was carried out spectacularly and i couldnt help but gasp at the twin part. amazingly well written. what a surprising twist!
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Oh dear! Now that was a strange dilemma! I should've seen it coming! Good work and I couldn't help but laugh!
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Oh no!Disaster!
This is a terribly superb twist, left me gob smacked! It’s a crying shame and very sad! I think for anyone who has siblings this will definitely provoke a uneasy reaction!
Great job
Best of luck!
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Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Philip's Way"
glad you found it interesting Best Wishes George +++ -
swim.x
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Twilight"
so glad you liked it Best Wishes George ++++ -
Venus25
Many Thanks for your kind comments on"Philip's Way"
So glad you liked it Best Wishes George
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What a grand story...
and what a twist!!! Nice job....
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This one very well written piece...
It has much meaning to say the least.
Glad my contest you have chosen to enter...
On this poem the spotlight might e centered.
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i love this the word twist is just fucking writtein in huge letters all over this truly you have a talent for what i was looking for as art you have written and i give you that my all great write i loved every word and im amazed you have not got gold for it thank you for joining my contest and best of luck -bows- (*)
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WOW!!!
This is an absolutly amazing poem. I can't say much else!
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Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Philip's Way" glad you liked it
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dark-prince
Many thanks for your kind comments and
subsequent Gold Trophy on Philip's Way"
I'm glad you liked it Best Wishes and
Kind Regards George
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Wow even though that was a great
and slightly disturbing write
it doesn't exactly fit the style of this contest.
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wow this did have a twist. Bless them it takes you in.
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I feel like I'm reading a VC Andrews book. Thanks for entering...
Friendly Suggestion: It might help the reader to capitalize the names throughout the poem and use some quotes. It is just a little hard for the eyes and mind to follow sometimes
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Farewell My Lovely
Many thanks for your kind comments on"The Little Wave"
Very much appreciated,hope you're not seasick.
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"Philip's Way" have conformed to your suggestions.Hope you like it now.Best Wishes George ++++
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I didn't have a problem with the poem in the first place It's different and interesting to read. V.C. Andrews is an author sort of known for books tackling taboo relation ships (brother/sister etc). Wasn't a bad thing
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WOW. I loved this. It definitely had a twist of an ending to it. Incredible. It was definitely an excellent write, and I enjoyed how it was written like a story. Is this really a true story? haha, I have to ask. I'd pick out my favorite lines, but I really liked the whole thing. Thanks for entering & best of luck to you !! ♥
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Thank you for your entry, good luck, Josie
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You've turned something very taboo and something seen as so distasteful by the standards of today's society into something sweet and very, VERY touching. You manage to get past the wall of societal rules and defenses by endearing the reader to the characters you've created before you reveal the entire truth to them. This is a poem about what love- real, true love- is about, and you've blown the love poetry genre out of the water. BRAVO!!!
Best of luck and thanks for entering!!
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first immpression: i dont wanna read this, the backgrounds ugly, the titles...um...idk... and its hard to read...
i dont like it, but i dont hate it...its differnt (thats good) but its not like special or anything
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Thank you for entering - but Sorry... This entry is not eligible for the "Two sisters" competition, which specified a PAIR of complementary poems in identical form submitted together.
However, you can still earn points in this competition if - once the results are announced (but not before!), and not later than 1 May, you comment on other people's entries. To earn points in this way, comments should be at least 30 words long (your own words - quotes from the poem do not count), have something meaningful to say, and say it in standard English!
The results should be ready not later than 11.00am British Summer Time today (24 April)
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Ah this is so moving! I was told I was adopted by my father when I was 13 and I understand why that would make them feel a bond and to be twins must be a very powerful bond. I applaud your open mind.
Peace Georgia
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Is it a true story?
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asianlight
No Georgia all my story poems are
figments of my overworked Imagination
"Blue Eyes" "Peters Girl" "Little girl
"Hit and Run" "The Waife" "The Pit"
"Little Barefoot Girl" "Values"
"The Racist" "Philip's Pup" "Little John". ."The U.F.O" and "The Near Death Experience" are True.
The rest of the 120 odd are mainly
opinionated observations of the creatures that inhabit this planet
Best Wishes Peace and kindness George
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