Trying to escape
The impossible,
Dark and quiet
I stay in fear
emptyness as my company
trying to search for life
Jumping from planet
To planet
In hopes of finding earth,
And reaching for the stars
Sparkling and scattered all around,
just floating in the air
Trying to hold on to reality
Because heaven is so overrated
I never did anything wrong,
It wans't my time
Wanting to just wake up
from this nightmare of barrenness
Yet why is this so damn hard
I don't belong here
I never did and never will
In this universe of nothing
Just let me go
Let me be free
And escape back to reality
A contest entry
- Escape From The Afterlife! by brightXdarkness.
600 points, ended June 20, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love the repitition! The repitition of, "I don't belong here..." makes the feeling even stronger in this poem! I really like it. I was able to feel as if I was the one who was desperate to leave the afterlife. Also, nice imagery!! And great ending =D lol. Sorry this comment seems kind of repetitive too. How coincidental. Anyways, Thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck in having done so!!
Alex -
Ahh its so catching.. i admire the flow and intense emotions involved with it. beautiful imagery, i really like it. Another reason why i like it, i used to write such poems once.. they portray the inside of your mind and thoughts straight off your pen and are so pure enough. I look forward to read more of you..
i'm glad you write u have my similarity when writing. wow cool
take a look at mine too, and must read the oldest ones, u'l find d similarity
love,
Mansoor xxxx
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deep
wow i love the intense deepness of it.
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