How I wish that you could see,
he'll never love you as much as me.
I wish I could convince you dear,
he is killing your soul I fear.
Though your child is also his,
he is dragging you into his abyss.
I know you believe his love is true,
but believe he is no good for you.
I see you cry. I feel your pain.
When will you see it's all in vain?
My dearest daughter whom I adore
Please realize you deserve much more.
He lies, steals, and breaks your heart.
Why can't you see it's time to part?
I loved you even before you were concieved.
And always, in you, I have believed.
My prayers are only for your happiness.
He causes for you so much duress.
Please, dear daughter can't you see?
He will never love you as much as me.
Author notes
My daughter is with a (man)? who treats her awful. He works only for a few days then buys video games and other junk rather than diapers or formula for his child. It kills me inside to see her with him.
crazymomma
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This is a very sad write, I can't imagine how you must feel having to watch someone you created and love so much get treated so awfull. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Heartbreaking
I am terribly sorry about what your daughter is going through. Speaking as a father who has an adopted daughter of his own, I can relate to what you're going through. She had a stormy relationship with her biological parents. She has come to forgive them for their sins, but it's just not the same. Thanks so much for sharing this.
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I can understand your pain for your daughter. I've seen people with someone they could do without...but in the end, it's their own decision. I can understand why someone would stay with someone even though arguements occur and the family may not like that person. it's hard for them but in the end, love conquers all. I'm sure she will realize or he will realize what is going on and they will either work it out themselves or split....but it does take time. all you can do is be there for her and comfort her....may all be well for all of you. thank you for entering and good luck.
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this is sad
this is very sad
hope things are better for you
btw i love the poem
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beautiful
this is very touchingg
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Very emotional work here Jennifer. My heart goes out to you.Hopefully things will get better my friend. Thanks again.
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So very true, a fathers love is so beautiful and strong and should always be accounted for, as I always listen to my Dad's advice. I don't always agree, but I listen to it and respect it, for I know he knows a lot more about young men than I do, as he was once one. It hurts that sometimes people wont see what's truly hurting them, as love truly is blind. I know that. I have my own stories, but I hope she realises that she's in a lose lose situation with himand she could do so much better.
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This is a powerful write to your daughter. It must be so difficult to watch her being hurt. She is lucky to have a mother who cares so much. I wish you the best and hope things get better for your daughter. Blessings, Patty
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Very Nice!
This is a lovely write about your daughter and your concerns. The hardest role of parent is to let your kids make mistakes. Keep the love up and just let them know you are there! All the best. Thanks for sharing.
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We bring them up and teach them good things and yet we can't live life for them. Our heart break for their mistakes. Let's hope she see what you gave her is better than him. Great write and thoughts you poured out your heart,
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this is really sweet... but unfortunately we have to let the ones we love make their own mistakes, walk their own path, which is sometimes the hardest thing to do everrrr, when we know there could be something better for them. But personally I believe that's what reincarnation is for... we get the chance to try again and learn the next time around. No one can do it for us. Detachment's tough with the ones we love most, but it brings the most peace to your heart. Best of luck...
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If it were allowed...I would give you three more applaud guys...
Beautiful once again.
Take care.
Write on.
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powerful message of love and the impotence of having to stand back and watch, while your loved ones make decisions that you see as less than good. An honest poem, showing real care and concern. Have faith in your daughter, you must have taught her what you know.
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Sometimes all you can do is be there.
Hopefully she will realize soon enough she deserves more.
Heart felt write!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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man if this is really how you feel then as a mother as you are you should step in and let her know how you feel and i know that if i understood this peom then she will with no doubt and it is rather good Great Job! -Gore
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This is a very common problem...tragic really for such boys to be given the title of man. However, it is also universally true that daughters will love who they will love. She must find out for herself the error of her ways...wouldn't it be easier if she just took your advice? I think whether to give this or not depends on your relationship with your daughter. You don't want to push her away.
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The message here is very clear. It is a very powerful and beautiful piece. However, something I would like to say as a young woman, who was not that long ago a teenager, or child, and remembers it very well: I knew my mother loved me, I knew she meant the best for me.. But all I wanted was to live and learn and not have other people interfere with my life. I would hear my mother out, out of respect, but I never did like it when she pushed her opinion on me. I understand, now, as a mother myself that you want to defend her, you want her to see.. But I also see now, as a mother, that the man that helped create my children, no matter how much a jerk, he is still their daddy and he still loves them. He may think more of himself, as is human nature (survival of the fittest, blah, blah) but that doesn't mean he loves his child any less than she does. The problem here, is that she may hear what you have to say, out of respect, but she may also take personal offense even if she doesn't say it to you, because she may feel that you are telling her she made the wrong decision, or is making a bad decision by staying with this guy. No one ever wants to hear that they are wrong. Try to put it in a manner that is less "you, you, you" and make it more about your feelings, and not what he or she does when you speak to her. Tell her before you give her the poem it may be a little upsetting but you wanted her to see it, and then tell her about how you feel, starting with "I feel" ... That is all I know to tell you. I do wish you the best of luck, and hope she sees the light, because it is indeed unhealthy for her to remain in this situation..
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I understand what you are trying to tell your daughter here, although if my mom gave this to me all it would do is cause a fight. I'm sure there is a better, kinder more subtle way. Yes the message is very loud and clear, I'm just not too sure it will be listened to this way.
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Ok yes it is loud and clear!!
It is Also Hurt-ful
How old is your Daughter?
she lives on her own right?
she can handle it
don't brake apart love
it may look like there is none
but if that was the case
why would they stick around togeather?
it's not like he beat her!
if he does go ahead!! brake thenm apart!!
but if he doesn't
Give the man the Mother Son talk!!
the one where the
Mom puts Down the Foot on the Boyfriend!
And tells the Man to straighten up!!
it's not ur kids fult
it's the guys right?
welll the poem is good
i wouldn't Advise showing her...
enless you wan't to be in a fight w/ her
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Ah..this is indeed a true voice coming directly from the soul of the poet..this is honestly stated verse..wonderful indeed...
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very powerful
That's a great message, now I don't want to judge at all or stick my nose in but sometimes it can be better for people to make their own mistakes as they are theirs to make. But you have a very good point and I'm sure many mothers have felt the same before now. we all want to look after our children
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I feel your disappointment here and know you want to protect your child but if you keep on at her and show your distate for her partner then she will move further away from you. Just support her and be there for her when things go wrong. I can relate because I went through the same thing with my mum and though I knew she was right it took a while to finally see he was no good.
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what comes around goes around
I feel your hurt, I hear the pain
you want to act, but cannot gain
I'd like to send, a message through
Some day he'll need, seek love true blue
from his daughter, he never knew
erased all gone, so sad but true....
rudolf
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ahhh a true mom who loves her daughter... my mom should have taken lessons from you.. anyway
great poem and i hope she listens before its too late...
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There's nothing like a mothers love...only wanting to see their child happy and never in so much pain.
This is such a heart felt poem and I hope your daughters eye's will see and her heart will open up to your wisdom.
Beautifully written with nice rhyme and flow.
Great message!!
All we can do is be there for them in whatever way they will let us...my son's is somewhat the same situation.
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I clicked this as I felt so strongly about this issue,not only is this heartbreaking but its very emotional indeed,any parent hopes their child will meet someone decent and caring,God Bless,Hazel
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nice to give at the end of a talk
but to get across to her, you REALLY have to point out his bad points, that the pain he is causing her though she denies will never go away if she stays.
I'm not sure how she'll react to how much you love her more than he does lines...sometimes that expression in practice goes awry. If he's hurting her this much, what will be the psychological impact on the child when its a little older-that men are like this and this is okay?! Maybe touch on that a bit...
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