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A Waiting Poem

Earth revolves every year;
        Hope eases every tear
Another day ends; I’m stalling
        For love’s not here; I’m still calling.

Colors change every season;
        Life moves in every reason
Clock strikes twelve; it’s already morning
        But your love’s not here; I’m still mourning.

Water strokes shores in every wave;
        Heart skips faster in every rave
This lifetime would soon cease; I’m still waiting
        Your love, though it brings me pain, I’m wanting.

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4c. Wait for you by Elliot Yamin

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  • Shuberth
    November 5, 2008

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    Very Nice

    This poem is very well written and I loved every part of it, the story the rhymes were great and it flows so well…
    I enjoyed reading it, I cannot pick my fav stanza cos I loved the whole thing…

    Good Poem!

    Thanks for sharing

    Shuberth


  • Amera gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    Beautiful rhyme and meter with a fantastic message. I like the structure; it's different.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • nilav
    April 21, 2008

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    the pain of longing is there...the smooth flow of words with rhyme and rhythm is very interesting to read...