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I Do Not Grade on Curves



Brawny studs single team the parking lots
cruising for wheelwrights on a bender

Under the sodium vapor light
McCarthy sneers, stoned cold thug

He lumbers by, a pile of splintered boards
caught inside his boot leg jeans

The chicks dig him with his Marciano nose
his breath like bourbon on a garlic high

Smell the air, he thunders, there's a fire coming
drop your beer!


Deer bolt from the blazing Everglades
the final Florida panther squashed by a fire truck

Miami's over there, past the smoke and South Beach
where leggy fashion models, a dime a dozen

Compete with each other for World Class lifeguards
with outrageous sexual inuendoes and stand up tits


Oblivious to the conflagration chewing
even now at their palm fringed foundations

I'm not jealous, I'm a brawny stud myself
I teach literature 101 at the Junior College


I do not grade on curves

 

 

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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    May 3, 2008
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    LMAO!!!
    I clicked on this, not certain what I should expect (except obvious greatness, after the last one I read), but I must admit I was wonderfully surprised.
    This was just brilliant!
    You dazzle me with your sharp wit, acute awareness, and natural talent with words.
    You are being added to my favorites list ASAP!

  • Merciful-Manner
    April 22, 2008

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    good write

    That's a very good write I liked it very much. You did a good job at portraying visuals, and stuff. That's great i like it very mucho... Keep up the good work!


  • Amera gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    Oh my! This has a wonderful modern tone with a strong pointed declaration. You are an amazing story teller and I love reading what you don’t say in between the lines.

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • zara
    April 20, 2008

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    I like this voice of yours, storytelling with the finest of details.

    I'm wondering if the last two stanzas belong there, ending a poem which to me is about such extreme self-centeredness that even the fires go unnoticed. I want to know what happens next, rather than hear about you at this point...though the lines are good, and maybe could fit in earlier in the poem.

    The last line, well, you said it in the title, and the intelligent reader will enjoy noticing you said it, without the reminder.

    That said, it's a cool poem, and the images are great - especially that of McCarthy.

    (p.s. typo: college)

    cheers ariosophenes!



  • balakirev
    April 20, 2008

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    Very nice, something completely different than most stuff I read at AP. I love the last couple of lines, clever.

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