today the sun
forgot to
rise, the birds
had to lift
it manically.
beating wings
make teenage
flings in corn
fields- purple
mills stoic.
the barn, body
pressed to it
tightly, pursuing
atheist sex.
the body,
not the barn.
burning
aggressively;
a rapist-
the farm goes
up in flames
that claim
everything.
even the tractor.
even the little
man plowing.
Author notes
"A Thousand Splendid Suns" is the title of Khaled Hosseini latest novel. (Author of "The Kite Runner"
In a list
A contest entry
- ways to burn by second-born.
500 points, ended April 25, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is very interesting - concise with very powerful images...and I like how a book inspired you to write this piece...thank you for sharing this write!
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Oh... *is a bit awe-struck*
I must admit, I recognized the title, though I haven't read the book yet. But this poem really took my breath away, no matter where the title came from. The way you put words together is enticing, like a calligraphy made from diction. I loved "pursuing atheist sex" and the ending was phenomenal.
Really, the whole thing was such a fantastic read I'm going to have to read it again. Bravo! *bows down in admiration*
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LOL thanks so much. That means a lot.
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holy sh*t! the ending!
O___O
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thanks
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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
i want to read this again and again. i love your style, really incredble first/last lines, oh really, truly, seriously.
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thank you
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Wow! This poem is definitely very full of passion and warmth, I like it. Very interesting beginning, the sun having to be lifted by birds is such a beautiful image, and it comes in contrast with the heat... physical and emotional... I really like this a lot.
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thank you. The title was taken from Khaled Hosseini novel, which is very pretty.
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