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Oasis

My hair is stuck to my neck,
like peanut butter to bread.

So humid and moist are the days,

and weeks and days of summer. 

 

The blazing sun shines down,

and scorches my already red skin.

Where did I put my sunscreen,

and why didn't I wear a hat?

 

I need water, my throat is dry,

I feel like a withered plant.

Without water, I will perish,

and I refuse to die right now.

 

Seeking shade under the trees,

I find a waning brown squirrel.

It's dehydrated and needs water,

so I give it my last drops.

 

No water whatsoever now,

I seek a river or a pond.

Wandering through the forest,

I finally find my oasis.

 

Is it an illusion, a dream?

Am I hallucinating right now?

My eyes do not deceive me,

at last I find my saviour.

 

I drink from it like an animal,

savouring the tastless liquid.

The sun still scorches down,

but I am safe, for now. 

 

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  • wendymolly
    June 10, 2008

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    every stanza pretty much blew mty senses in many different directions! And that is always a GOOD thing!!! Very original in depth and personal. And so it is with your awesome prose, that you are a contest finalist!!! Good Luck in the contest and have a great week up ahead!!!
    ~pithyAplomb.


  • Nakatrea
    April 21, 2008

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    kewlness! very good. SEE writing about how you feel makes for much more believable poetry. trust me. good job i loved this! you have a good way of describing things. good job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


    • shopaholica
      April 21, 2008
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      It's not done yet
      My mom needed the computer xD
      I guess I could have used mine but its like from 2002!!!