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After hearing the Newness of Words and Poet Seers

carved into wood
and grain,
listened to-
he chiseled nouns
and adjectives with careful choosing
plaques of them
resonated into rings,
and thoughtfulness
inclined on the bias,

mitred corners slip inside my head
wonders of what/when/how
auricular components and visionless patina
fall on the edge of reason:
sit up, take stock
of realities and kinder portions
towards man, friend and family.

The tones in his voice are:
the essence of sharing
of food and love.
nurtures manna on my morningtime
moments; like the touch to a child
tender strokes of hair on foreheads.

Subtle sounds follow synapses
expanding the open/mind.
Not cliched-said-before
in his way, newness is vivid
like a rough sketch
waiting for ink & colour.
Compassion thrives from ancient tongues
and present-day stories,
He, is the psalm
of my Book of Days.

The narrative of my waiting
sits where pages turn to palms.
Flex like the willow of his eye;
to see what he sees
inhale the day/night of seers,
parables of plenty
bring labours forth,
where fruited trees
are plucked from.

I am still hungry
still, in-need
to swallow/digest/eat
pray for the thankful parts
that are served,
on silver platters
or a soup bowl
made of wood.

 

 

 

 

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Inspired and for my Friend - you know.............

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  • Wandika gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    Really Rich

    I like this very much. Your use of words are both special and captivating.

  • Rowan gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    well I hate to do what Zara said; say how lovely this and be gone, lol, but I find it hard to critique you, capitals and all.
    I like the diversity of who this person is; I think many of us are practising more than one art; it's what creative minds do. I'm alway doing more than one thing at a time; maybe that's why I'm so fabulously unfoccussed?
    hehehehe
    Write away hon, I'm listeing.


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    "The narrative of my waiting
    sits where pages turn to palms.
    Flex like the willow of his eye;
    to see what he sees
    inhale the day/night of seers"

    Far too beautiful for mere words, my Friend...




  • misselaineous
    April 20, 2008
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  • zara
    April 20, 2008
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    What astounds me most about your work is the quantity. I can't nearly keep up, especially as I'm not coming around that much. Mostly these days I read but find it hard to comment.

    We're a bit rough around the edges here, some details not attended to (such as "his" sometimes capitalized and sometimes not, and the spelling of "componements") and the metaphors mixing up somewhat, in that the subject starts out carving wood, then becomes a painter, a psalm, a food-server, and even God, with those capitals.

    The idea of poet/lover as woodworker is cool, and you might consider staying with that.

    But still, it's amazing to me that, even though you write poem after poem, you can pack just one with so many images and ideas. You're unstoppable!

    Hello, darlin'. I'm having a cup of Yorkshire, and thinking of you.



    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 20, 2008
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      It's funny, but when Cvillelisa capitalises odd words, no one says a thing, when Lute does it, nada! when Suzi does it,nada!! when I do it, I get slammed..... ugh?

      Maybe i should just type as I want to huh? and put in the Queens.. ? - thanks for the spelling catch-up, I don't know what the hell went wrong there

      I like the idea of this 'person' being many things, because in real life, they are and are trying to be, so development of the poet soul is good.
      ,
      I write when I want to write.... seems funny, people assume I write loads.... but actually Suzi is far more productive than me of late........

      you caught me on an off day luv, sorry

      I think I need some strong arabica

      • zara
        April 20, 2008

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        I used to complain regularly to Lisa about the caps, and now she just knows how I feel about them, so I don't say anything anymore. Lute lives on a different planet than me, and Suzi, well, I'd say something if I encountered it, most likely, but I really haven't read that much of her, and also don't "know" her as well, so I might hesitate.

        As for everyone else, I can't speak for them. Mostly this place is not a workshop, I realize, and the standard acceptable comment is to praise the poem and be gone. Sorry, I just can't do that. The upside, I suppose, is that if I do offer praise, you know it's genuine. It's always a risk to critique around here, but really, critique is what I would hope for in return. How's a poet supposed to hone her craft, otherwise, assuming she wants to? Praise means nothing to me, unless the person praising has also been critical.

        Of course, write as you want, every opinion to be taken with a grain or a handful of salt. Didn't mean to hurt you, darlin.


        • NurseChilly gold member
          April 20, 2008

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          you didn't hurt me luv, was just being as the fellows over the pond say = ballsy....

          not hurt no no no, you can critique as you like, and as you see fit, that is the best way
          as you know. I wasn't let into a certain WORKSHOP many years ago, because I did/do speak my mind. so I would rather always hear your thoughts than not, always...



          forgive my tardiness, as I am grumpy gouch today

  • tara wilson gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    "The tones in his voice are:
    the essence of sharing
    of food and love.
    nurtures manna on my morningtime
    moments; like the touch to a child
    tender strokes of hair on foreheads."

    Sigh....absolutely gorgeous, Gill


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    April 20, 2008
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  • Suzanne Dia
    April 20, 2008

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    Sometimes, the world knows that we need a friend, and just happens to hand one over just in time.





    I love you.


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    April 20, 2008

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    This is beautiful Gilly and you allow me to feel so very much honoured.
    Besides this, your ability to appreciate, obviously reaches to the 'Boundless' and such hunger for this is truly a priceless gift. Sol x
    I love the photo too.

    Insignificant really, but you might want to look at line 21 'the', and I only say that, purely so you know that I've enjoyed reading every word you've written.


  • Namita
    April 20, 2008

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    "He, is the psalm
    of my Book of Days"

    Oh wow... this is indeed so beautiful... yes, I too am so eager to know who this friend of yours is! You make him seem very special!! This is so gorgeous, Gilly... love the last stanza.

    - namita


  • layla.
    April 20, 2008

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    wow... i think i am beyond eager to know/see this friend of yours in person. he sounds wonderful, i mean if he can make his dear ones feel so special and if he is THAT warm... there is no other word to describe him best. it takes a kindred soul to understand another so completely.

    you have expressed this beautifully. i love you big sis.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 20, 2008
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      thank you Esha... ... I think your comment might make him blush somewhat.. lmao...

      ahem - but yes, he is a special friend and warm in heart is true indeed

      thanks again luv

      G.x

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