Mirror blurred
in another way to embue,
crosses in divine
true mysterious aspirations.
Age in accent of a mountain..
An impulse to confess,
affection with longings,,
not even an experience
of missing feelings of embrace,
nobody dare to touch,
not even understand,
enough to have poor perspire
to have respire.
Author notes
~spiritualangel~
Prompt: "Because she never really learnt how to breathe" - H.R.
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired - Under 50 Words by Exodus.
525 points, ended May 10, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really love that single line. It's stunning
I don't think the repeating of 'to have' worked well in the last two lines but other than that it was a great piece, thank you
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A thought provoking piece this one...I do love a thought provoking piece. :) Leaving me feeling intrigued and well whts wrong with that hey :) Strong words, to get the point across in a short amount of time, well done and well obviously another one of yours I have enjoyed clicking on and reading hehehe :D *hug* *rose* *hug* Cindy
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ooohhhh, this is lovely
great write and good luck
take care
stephanie =)
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Excellent
What a great take on the prompt. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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