Amid gentle rocking hands of wild blue
clouds from heaven form a face
again you
again tears
better off alone
In a list
A contest entry
- My prompt by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 20, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - how far?? by onapedestalIstand.
300 points, ended May 6, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is nicely done..short,but to the direct pione,,well done..sarah=P
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Oh. This is an interesting poem that you have going on in here.
It is very short but I think that it suggests a lot. Lestways, it suggests a lot to me. It sounds like two people that really care about each other but can't seem to get along and have to stay apart. Or that's what I see in it. Maybe that's not what you meant but I thought you did a good job with this.
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awww this is sooo beautiful
wonderful write and good luck
take care
stephanie
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nice....
Like it
Simon -
Deeply descriptive and profoundly creative... well done fine poet... x
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great poem so much feeling especially these lines:
"again you
again tears
better off alone"
great stuff sirously so short but so much feeling that is definitaly tallent
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Sad but beautiful, conveying in so few words depth of feeling and fabulous imagery. Brilliant! Good luck in the contest with this bittersweet write.
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