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Chasing After Life

It is the after life I chase.
I been there once before.
The beauty indescribable; the peace on earth unknown.
The safety of the arms of God can not be found on earth.
To be brought back and trapped between this splendor and the pain of this life of earth; puts you in the gray of clouds of mist and darkness dreams.
Interrupted only by the strangers that come to inflict pain.
Help me to find my way back home to the beauty and my peace.
Ala, alas it's not to be and I awake to the pain of life again.
To return and never return to this imperfect earth; I am to learn the
rochma and forgiveness of myself and all.
I then will stay in my afterlife with no need to escape.  

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  • ModernXTimes
    June 20, 2008

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    Very cool. I know that the creator didn't really think it was relevant to the contest, but i thought it was. It was interesting how you wanted to go back to the afterlife after you had escaped already, but the horrible truth is that you can't go back and now you're basically stuck in limbo between earth and heaven. I'm not sure, but do you get back out in the end and decide to live with the hell you have on Earth? That part kind of slid past me. Either way, I liked the entry a lot. good luck!

    Sincerely,
    ModernXTimes


  • brightXdarkness
    June 17, 2008

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    Um... did you read the prompt to my contest? Did you read the rules? I think you have done what many many many people on allpoetry do. Read the title and then just enter a poem... any poem. My contest is called "Escape From the Afterlife" not "Escape to the Afterlife." But it's okay... maybe next time you'll remember to read all the contest rules and prompt throughly. Just remember to keep on writing and don't be lazy (that's when you start to make mistakes like this)

    Keep on writing,
    Alex


  • Stars of Hope
    May 26, 2008

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    That is cool. wow. You know, some people think it's weird that I'm not afraid of death. But I know that were I'm going is going to be so much better than this corrupt world we live in today. I can't imagine the anxiousness you must experience, though. To have actually seen what it's really all about. That's awesome. God bless you! Good Luck!

    Luv ya oodles!
    Courtney


  • pattyann4500
    May 23, 2008
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    I know someone who has experienced the afterlife. I know it's a sin to envy, but I can't help but wish I could experience it myself. Through him, I have found myself wishing and praying for that beautiful experience myself--for eternity. A lovely piece. Patricia