pristine forests cover the mountains high
as morning sun promises life
strife of yesterday, gone
songbirds sing to sounds of a fife
a new day begins with a happy sigh
life merrily goes on
dawn once more
has spoken true
of love and life’s true meaning
weaning the night from the mornings’ bright sky
flowers smile with happiness rife
life with a brand new dawn
as trees sway, no sorrow or strife
the world is aglow, the night says good bye
and nature holds no pawn
drawn decor
their lovely hue
with beauty ever streaming
seeming to shine among loves purest light
might nature persevere through day and night
Dee Garner
© April 19, 2008
Author notes
My first attempt at Ian's individualtean form. Please be gentle
In a list
A contest entry
- Invitation only by ian sawicki.
1000 points, ended April 21, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Uplifting!
Wow...I really needed to read this right now. It has me thinking of the Kingdom to come! I've no idea what "Ian's individual team form" is but I really love this! Glad you won the trophy. It's Nice continuity & rhyme!
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Thanks for your kind comment
the individualtean form is one created by individuality. This was my first attempt at it and it was interesting to do. You can find more info on the form if you check out the forms list on his author page.
Dee
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I thought that this was a complete joy to read.
It owned a softness all its own.
"Weaning the night from the mornings’ bright sky."
This is among my favorite in the poem. It puts the perfect picture in my mind of a sunrising.
Very lovely.
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hello my lovely mama
Great to read this beautiful piece here.
Wish you the best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Oh wow, one of your finer poems I think! I have no idea what a individualteam form is but if this is an example, I am all for it.
A sunny morning has that effect on me...giving the feeling that life begins anew. And I like how you intertwine love and nature
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Very nicely done!
Enjoyed your poem, Dee! Best of Luck in the contest!
Maureen
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Your poem is breathtaking in its imagery and splendor of nature! So tranquil and comforting to the heart!
Just beautiful Dee!!
I wish you all the best in the ocntest!!
Linda
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Catz,first time I have reviewed your work. I liked the form you presented in this. Nice effort and style. THANKS!!
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a good poem here and for your frist attempt at the form you have done well, as it is a tricky one to do
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I've been trying to get the font color to change from real light so I can change backgrounds but it doesn't want to work for me so will keep trying
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