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Poetic Rose Bush

A rose in the garden of words,
with petals soft as rain,
gives flight to the song of the birds,
sweet phrases in refrain.
Composed with love, her words instill
the singing of the whippoorwill.
Composed with love.
Composed with love.
As syllables dance from her quill.

A rose in the garden of words
caressing hearts with love,
a beauty that reaches skywards,
a blessing from above.
Beautiful words she weaves with care,
poetic words that take you there,
beautiful words,
beautiful words,
like mystical notes in the air.

A rose in the garden of words,
like angels that rehearse
as they fly to the earth in herds,
flowers that weave a verse.
Make children dance over the moon;
“the fork ran away with the spoon”,
make children dance,
make children dance,
creationsfromheart makes me swoon.

 

 

 

Author notes

Dedicated to poet, author: creationsfromheart
Happy Birthday Susan!

Trijan Refrain:
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Ellis gold member
    February 8
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    Enjoyable, beautiful tribute poem.


  • Desire gold member
    April 25, 2008

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    Precious!!

    How in the world did I miss this one
    I'm going to have to go backwards and grab what I missed
    Sorry~~~
    Beautiful verse You have penned for a Beautiful Spirit~
    You are so darn good at forms~ Form Queen!!
    They just roll off the tongue~~
    Love this one!!

    A rose in the garden of words,
    like angels that rehearse
    as they fly to the earth in herds,
    flowers that weave a verse.
    These lines grabbed~~

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    April 25, 2008
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    Excellent

    An Excellent piece dedicated to Susan-Very well-written & Versed and congratulations on the Silver

  • Judith Chandler
    April 24, 2008

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    Nice form and nicely done here. A good way to express birthday greetings. I especially like the last few lines of the last verse, so playful.
    jjj


  • Ithica silver member
    April 23, 2008

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    I just love this form... it is so festive and perfect for those birthday wishes to an awesome lady...


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 21, 2008
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    Beautiful poetic tribute-
    Love Hilly xxx


  • PerVirtuous
    April 21, 2008

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    This is one of your best efforts. The language is unbelievable and the content is sharp and crisp. The flow is fluid and easy. This is like a little stream running into a deep pool. Beautiful!!!


  • jo-el
    April 20, 2008

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    these forms are always so musical when ya do it and i really liked this one too. extremely impressed with the 1st stanza. ..very exceptional. the last line seems a bit awkward to me. aside from that..perfect form.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 20, 2008
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    Indeed - my sister's voice.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    A beautiful piece for a lovely poet. And so very Amera
    Great penning!
    Normally I would trijan a comment but I'm rather stuck at the moment, can't even find a bloody limerick.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    This indeed is a beautiful piece. But arent they always?? Great job love.
    I love you

    Passions


  • creationsfromheart
    April 19, 2008
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    see I am so touched i for got theese!

  • creationsfromheart
    April 19, 2008

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    Amera, I thank you so much for this it is not just a fantastic form, but the words are so wonderful you done and made me get all teary eyes, this is beautiful, I am going to print this out if ok with you and add them to my scrap book, I will cherish this write always, and some day when you are a well known poet! In the writing world, I can say hey I have a write she done for me personally I am honored to have you write such a beautiful poem for me thank you from the depths of my soul.

    LOve Susan


    • Amera gold member
      April 19, 2008
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      Sure it's OK You can do what ever you want with it, I wrote it for you.

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