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Paralyzed

Sinking~

pains affliction

  diving isolation

          losing touch

[ to barren,

          hearts ]

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  • Kari gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    This was very deep. You've done very well and I wish you the best of luck in the contest
    Kari


  • Aeonna
    April 23, 2008

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    wow, i feel the cold and isolation in your words.. i need to hide now...

    Good Luck!

    Sister Grimm


  • ScarletO gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    Cold hearts can always be revived by the right lifeguard. Wonderful imagery used here. Good luck in the contest.


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 20, 2008
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    I liked this work showing your emotional side. Quite the work you put into this. THANKS!


  • never in his arms
    April 20, 2008
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    short and sweet.
    simply beautiful


  • Dark Otter
    April 20, 2008

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    Good take

    Sounds emotionally petrified. Feelings that I have definitely had. Your style is interesting in short verse. I might steal a few tricks of yours. (forgive me) I like different ideas.

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