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Blue Popsicles




I was bit by a dog named Duffy.
It was very upsetting;
there were tears
and Band-Aids
and Sue Anne's mother was very upset-
"Why would you try to climb on the back of the dog?!"
Duffy only had antipathy in his eyes for me.
We stood face to face;
he was woolly
and black
and smelled like wet dog.


The next day began normally:
Popeye cartoons on WBEN from Buffalo,
"Ring-a-Round the Rosy" with Sue Anne and her friends
...waiting for mother and father to come and reclaim me.
I has been delivered to Sue Anne's on what,
I suppose,
was my third birthday.
But there'd been no cake,
no fuss;
it would have only seemed anti-climactic, anyways:
Mother had gone to the hospital to have a baby.

And when the old Chevrolet pulled up
a swarm of children crowed around it to SEE!
to see the new baby!
They were greeted by the proud new father
who handed out a box full of blue Popsicles.
Blue Popsicles:
they had always been orange,
or chocolate,
or banana.
Blue Popsicles
...as if the universe could reinvent itself.

When the four of us drove away,
that April day in 1958 was as warm and comforting as any in June.
The sky, too, was blue.
The white clouds
seemed like soft, clean baby blankets
framing the face of a new-born sun.

I was bit by a dog named Duffy.
It was very upsetting;
but I smile when I think of it now.

 

 

 

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  • Cannonsfire
    October 2

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    Your childhood remembrance shines in this, i just hope the dog was forgiven lol..a wonderful story piece by you C


    • DogFish silver member
      October 2
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      I was always a bit nervous of dogs after that- but,we have to get beyond these little incidents!


  • Symphony
    April 28

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    what a way to tell the story - and bring back the memories this was UNIQUE and so descriptive; loved it

    thanks for entering


  • just mercedes gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    Effortless evoking of a childhood, and the images bring back a whole way of life. Really well done, 'as if the universe could reinvent itself.'


    • DogFish silver member
      August 22, 2008
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      Thank you ,Pania, it was writen for my brother who turned 50 this spring. It makes me rather heavy in heart, though, as he has fallen suddenly and seriously ill and we fear very much for the outcome of his present ordeal.


      • just mercedes gold member
        August 22, 2008
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        So sorry to hear that. I hope he smiles at the poem, too. After all, he's in it!

  • ea silver member
    August 19, 2008
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    Yes, blue ones are the best!


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    Something so simple that sticks out in your mind - so personal and you have made it seem such a big event. Easy to read and understand.


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    May 4, 2008

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    I enjoyed this little walk down memory lane, and I think you penned this nicely with enough imagery to set the scene. Well done and good luck in the contest. A lovely read!

    Shaz xx


  • Pandorea
    May 4, 2008

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    ""Why would you try to clime on the back of the dog?!"
    "

    there's a typo in that...should be 'climb'. i like this. the nostaligic tone, the memories..it's all good.

    thnks for entering.


    • DogFish silver member
      May 4, 2008
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      Thanks for the heads-up on "clime"...spellcheck can only do so much to cover up my ignorance!

      Thanks also for the kind remarks, Pandora!


  • obscenegesture
    April 21, 2008

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    It's not everyday you read something like this, it's hard to write something that's different. I like the way you weave nostalgia throughout the poem, it's really quite charming. It's like reading someone's memories. Good job!


  • NurseChilly gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    I like this... has a hint of the blues to it and it sings of loss and regrets... just as the blues should


    really good this one Gary, well done my friend



    G.x


  • Heart Sutra
    April 20, 2008

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    This is charming and I love how different it is from what most folks are writing around here. I enjoyed the story element and the whimsical feelings, as much as the caring aspects of it. Good luck in the contest.


  • phantomwriter
    April 19, 2008

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    This is adorable. Beautiful and touching. A few grammatical errors, but nothing tremendous. Great flow and vocabulary. Thank you for this piece, and best of luck in the contest

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